Cactus Critiques - Open





Hi guys, My name is Brittani. I am a proud Navy Wife that spends my extra time writing and reading. I’m obsessed with all things ocean related and I love spending time with my friends and family. Reading and Writing has always been a hobby for me and I’ve been on this website for over 5 years enjoying these very hobbies.




Here I will be offering Critiques. The amount and type might change depending on how much time I have and what I’m feeling, but I will always offer just critiques.

Currently, I am offering:

In-depth critiques on your first chapter


Overall Critiques on the first three chapters of your book.

These critiques will be posted in this book for you and others to see. I may leave comments on your story if I see something but it’s not guaranteed.




Now I’m sure all of you are wondering how you can get a critique from me. Well, that part is simple. Either post here, or post on my critique thread filling out my form and my form only. After that is complete I will take a look at the story and see if I’m interested in reading it or not. After I accept your request you will need to complete payment.

Payment: A permanent follow, and adding my novel High Class and Aqua Waters to a public reading list. That’s it. It’s super easy.

If you are not okay with this payment we can discuss alternatives privately.

Link to Book:






Story Title:


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Feel free to add your cover





From Book

Name - Story - Type - Post - Status

Tana - Love me, A Siren - First Chapter - Here - Currently Crafting Critique

Lola - Limerence - Overall - Here - Currently Crafting Critique

Emily - Not In Love - Overall - Here - Not Started

From Thread

Name - Story - Type - Post - Status

Shadow - A World Untold - Overall - 87 - Currently Crafting Critique

Dani - The Elementalists - Overall - 92 - Not Started

Completed Waiting For Posting

Name - Story - Type - Post - Status - Post Date

Meri - Schrodinger’s Child - First - 27 - 03/27/2019

Hollie - the Tag Bearer - Overall - 36 - Critique Completed - 03/29/2019

JGrace - The Legend Of The Moonflower Princess - overall - 39 - Critique Completed - 03/29/2019

Maia - Ash and Cinder - First - 43 - Critique Completed - 04/01/2019

Niharika - Finders Keepers - Overall - 48 - Critique Completed - 04/01/2019

Alayna - The Portrait Of Evienne - Overall - Here - Critique Completed - 04/03/2019

Leah - Killer Instinct: Carrie Unleashed - Overall - Here - Critique Completed - 04/03/2019

Darius - Carrie: Blood Of Redemption - Overall - Here - Critique Completed - 04/05/2019

Leighyeann - Project Life - First - 51 - Critique Completed - 04/05/2019

Rashida - Ostentatious - Overall - 52 - Critique Completed - 04/08/2019

Asa & D.J. - Core Machina - Overall - 56 - Critique Completed - 04/08/2019

Madison - Sapphire Dream - Overall - 60 - Critique Completed - 04/10/2019

A.S. Alsayyah - Sliced: Iron Earth - Overall - 62 - Critique Completed - 04/10/2019

Sondi - Lead Me Astray - Overall - 73 - Critique Completed - 04/12/2019

Sondi - Into The Wild Dark - Overall - 73 - Critique Completed - 04/12/2019

Ashton - Somebody To You - overall - 77 - Critique Completed - 04/15/2019

R.L. Tiger - Bound - Overall - 78 - Critique Completed - 04/15/2019

Kate - Reborn - Overall - Here - Critique Completed - 04/17/2019

Abi - Colour Me Blue - Overall - Here - Critique Completed - 04/17/2019






You may now post.


hi i would love for you to look at the first part of a short story i just published! it’s super short but i would love to get feedback on it!

Name: Allie (not sure if this is what you’re asking)
Username: kyrrai
Story Title: Jericho
Critique type: first chapter critique


Accepted, Please complete payment. <3

Yes, for style reasons I want to put peoples names in the queue instead of usernames. I think it looks better.


payment is done


You are missing the second half of it. Adding my novel High Class and my novel Aqua Waters to a public reading list <3


oh oops sorry i just did it


No worries. I got it. I will hopefully have this done for you tonight. <3


Hi hi hi

Yeah could you Czech out my story Black Rose?

Name: Paddy Ptah
Username: @paddycarr
Story Title: Black Rose
Critique: First two chapters ITS ALL I HAVE

Its sound of you appreciate it.


Denied, sorry. Please feel free to undo payment. The story just doesn’t seem like it fits into my personal style of story. I wish you the best of luck. <3


Hello :slight_smile:! I’d love to know what you think of my story!

Name: Sajee

Username: draphy

Story Title: The World Changer


Critique Type: Overall for three chapters.



Name- Avantika

Username- @rosemill2017

Story Title- Ex- Future Queen of Salovia


Critique Type- First chapter in-depth critique.


@draphy & @rosemill2017 - Both Accepted, please complete payment if you haven’t already. Payment is a permanent follow and adding my novel High Class and my novel Aqua Waters to a public reading list.


Yay, will do the payments now :slight_smile:!


Payment completed.
Thank you for accepting the request.


Of course, thank you for requesting.



Username: ModernWaterRider

Story Title: Dragon Rider In The Modern World


Critique Type: overall


Accepted, please complete payment and thank you so much for requesting.