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Title- 8 Pink Roses- A Quest To Zenora (posted now!)
Riley Garner is surprised when classmate Lucas West shows up at her door to ask her out. She’s even more shocked when he presents her with a bouquet of 8 pink roses, since as far as she knows roses are typically given in dozens. When she asks him why such a strange number, Lucas reveals that he knows she’s been having prophetic dreams for the past 8 weeks.
But she never told him.
They begin talking on the matter, and Riley realizes that Lucas can read people’s minds.
When she reveals this matter to her best friend Chloe, Chloe suggests that they ask their parents’ thoughts on the matter. They do so, and their parents reveal that Riley’s mom is not actually her mom, but she’s her aunt, and she and Lucas’ parents are actually from a planet which is basically an Earth 2.0 called Zenora.
Riley’s birth mom died during childbirth and her dad was lost during the war, so her aunt adopted her and raised her. But Riley also has a twin sister who lives on Zenora. She could not have survived the commute from Earth to Zenora as she was very weak when she was born, and the commute is energy-consuming. So, Riley’s grandmother raised her sister, Rhiannon on Zenora while her aunt made the commute to Earth, for a civil war was taking place on Zenora and she believed that the daughters of a war veteran would not be safe on Zenora.
She also revealed that the Riley and Rhiannon would not survive past twenty years of age on different planets as their life forces are connected. Riley has to go to Zenora and bring her sister back to Earth, as her mom/aunt and Lucas’ parents can’t, since they were blacklisted for immigrating to Earth during a crucial time in the war. And Zenoran commuting rules say that people can only travel to and from Zenora in pairs or groups because if one person is injured or fatigued in the commute, the others can take care of them.
So, Riley convinces Lucas to join her and the both of them go to Zenora, where they meet Rhiannon and her grandmother. Rhiannon tells them how she’s a crucial spy in the war, and she can’t leave Zenora as her grandmother is too sick to leave, and she can’t abandon the lady who raised her. So she tells them that she won’t leave.
Riley and Lucas stay to persuade her. When the mastermind of the war, General Kiligrano gets wind of Riley and Lucas and their intentions (not the complete extent of their powers), he knows that they will somehow take Rhiannon away and he will lose one of his biggest assets in the war.
So, he murders Rhiannon’s grandmother one day, when Rhia and Lucas are at another Zenoran country on a spying mission and Riley is out. He makes it seem like Riley murdered their grandmother, as the knife she uses for defending herself was the one with which grandmother was murdered. The knife was always with Riley ever since she got it at Zenora, and she never let go of it. To believe that Riley murdered grandmother is easy, as Riley never liked the lady and those feelings were reciprocated. Rhia feels betrayed and their twin bond is broken.
The both of them begin to deteriorate rapidly, and the doctor says that the only way to save them is to mend their bond. Lucas tries to investigate who actually murdered Riley and Rhia’s grandmother, but to no avail. Then, he meets one of Rhia’s friends who can manipulate time and he asks the friend to take him back in the past to the day when their grandmother died. Lucas discovers it was Kiligrano, but fears that Rhia won’t believe him.
So, he tells Rhia he knows who actually killed her grandmother and eats some Ascanian dingleberries, the truth serum of Zenora, in front of Rhia. Rhia asks him questions which he answered truthfully because of the berries. And then she discovers that Kiligrano killed her grandmother.
The three of them reveal this piece of information to Kiligrano’s followers, who genuinely liked the old lady and all his followers retaliated against him. The war was not yet over, but Kiligrano was overthrown, and imprisoned for murder. Rhia realized she had lost everything that tethered her to Zenora, so she agreed to leave Zenora and go to Earth with Riley and Lucas. The three of them get to Earth where Riley and Lucas continue dating, Rhia starts going out with Riley’s aforementioned best friend, Chloe and peace lives in their lives. The twins go back to Zenora on the anniversary of their grandmother’s death, and find out that the civil war had ended a few months ago, when the nations of Zenora united under the Treaty of the Bond. The Zenorans honor the sisters’ role in ending the war, as their bond was the thing that inspired them to stand unitedly.
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