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#22

Awesome, I’ll make sure to read and comment on your chapters within the next one to two days!

#23

Awesome, I’ll make sure to read and comment on your chapters within the next one to two days!

#24

Awesome, I’ll make sure to read and comment on your chapters within the next one to two days! Thanks for the comments as well!

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#25

Awesome, I’ll make sure to read and comment on your chapters within the next one to two days! :slight_smile:

#27

Great! No problem btw

#28

Just to let you know, I am starting on it now. :slight_smile: I’ll let you know when I am done!

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#29

Finished now! Well done, your story is so engaging!

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#30

Title: Ivory Black
Genre: Teen Fiction
Summary: Kai Haywood never thought anything of being adopted by a white family. What was the problem ? She had a stable home with two siblings and parents that loved her but that wasn’t the way Aaliyah Jackson saw it, in fact everything changed when Kai met Aaliyah. Kai soon realized she had no clue who she really was.
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/637525670-ivory-black-author-notes
I would like comments on my character development and general feedback
Only 2 chapters

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#31
  1. A Game of Changing Tides
  2. Pretty much everything. I really want to know how it comes across and what I can change.
  3. Okay, so I have the full completed work up right now. I think it’s 34 chapters, so I know it’s a lot & I totally understand why you wouldn’t want to take it on. Obviously I’d look at your work just as you’re looking at mine if you do, though.
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#33

https://www.wattpad.com/story/179487800-schrodinger's-child

I’d like you to do as many of these as I can, so tell me what/how many chapters I have to read. I just want general feedback but the later chapters especially need some attention.

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#34

Title: Havl’ozra.
Genre: Fantasy
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/707529876-havl’ozra-chapter-1-and-2
I have my first 2 chapters.
Looking for: General impression.

#35

2018_11_05_11

Title: The Super Chronicles: Byong Ki-soo

BIO: I am Byong Ki-soo, from Seoul, South Korea. I applied for a writers’ internship at an entertainment company, though I ended up being the secretary for this super hot, jerk. Even though he was a jerk, he somehow still got to me, and I started liking him. At the same time a forgotten criminal, came out from their hiding, coincidence…I think not.

Genres: Romance, Mystery, Young Adult, Fiction, Supernatural, Multi-Cultural

Languages: English (Official), Korean (Official), Japanese (Unofficial)

Rating: Some Mild Humor, Mature Themes, PG-12

Author: Kazashi

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/168352555-the-super-chronicles-byong-ki-soo

I really need feedback on the scene establishment, story structure, and character development.
Too many characters?
Not enough scene details?
Confusing outline?
Not enough story?
Give me the most.

#36

I will look at your chapters in the next couple of days!

#37

I will look at your chapters in the next couple of days!!

#38

34 chapter is a lot! For now, I can do a couple at a time?

#39

Yes thats fine! I wasn’t expecting you to do it all now, I just thought I’d forewarn you haha

#40

sure thanks, be sure to say which 2 chapters from your work you would like me to revieww.

#41

Title: Jericho
Genre: Short-story/spiritual
Summary: A writer sits in her apartment for days on end, searching for inspiration. She has a cabinet just for that, her own little cabinet of inspirations. One day she encounters a strange man she names Jericho, who changes her life forever. Follow this journey into the surreal.
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/181439802-jericho
What I’d like critiqued: just how readable it is and if the plot is too confusing. I have six really short chapters so far i’d like to be looked at.

Thanks!

#42

Read the first two chapters please and I will get to yours!

#43

I would love some feedback on my story!

Title: The Legend of the Moonflower Princess
Genre: Fantasy

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/691606982-the-legend-of-the-moonflower-princess-where

Since character development is pretty important, I would like some feedback on that. Would reading 3 chapters be alright?