๐Ÿ‘ Eliza E's Reviews (Round 1 - Closed) - One REVIEW Over the Cuckoo's Nest ๐Ÿฆ

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Reviews Offered (Round 1 - Closed)

Hello everyone, my name is Eliza! I love to read, and I am only recently startimg to write my own stories. I am still pretty knew to Wattpad but I found this forum and immediately fell in love with the idea. :sparkling_heart:

As a budding author I know what we all want. FEEDBACK! So I have decided to offer my services to you lovely Wattpaders!

Together, we can refine our stories into literary MASTERPIECES! :open_book:

Service:

Throughout your story I will leave several inline comments as well as a larger review at the end. Or if you prefer I can message it to you. Let me know which you prefer.

In my reviews I will be giving you honest and constructive feedback, focusing on:

:eight_spoked_asterisk: The Plot (Coherency, Plot Holes, etc.)
:eight_spoked_asterisk: The Characters (Initial thoughts, Appeal, Motivations, Impact on the Story, etc.)
:eight_spoked_asterisk: The World Building (Scale, Depth, etc.)
:eight_spoked_asterisk: The Authorโ€™s Style (Readability, etc.)
:eight_spoked_asterisk: The Affect (What emotional response did it illicit from me?)

I will rate each of these out of 10, giving you a score out of 50.

Additionally I will be answering these six questions:

  1. Did I like the story?

  2. What was my favorite part of the story?

  3. Do I have a least favorite part of the story?

  4. If I could change something, what would it be?

  5. Would I recommend this story to another person?

  6. What type of person would like this story?

I will also feature the highest rated story from each week, right here (in this topic) and will announce to my followers. And if I really enjoy your story, Iโ€™ll continue reading and I will add to my reading list! :books:

:moneybag:Payment will be split into three sections depending on how many chapters/parts you would like me to read.

:sparkle: 1 Chapter/Part = A Follow + An Inline Comment on my Prologue

:sparkle: 2 or 3 Chapters/Parts = A Follow + 2 Meaningful Comments on my Prologue

:sparkle: 3 to 5 Chapters/Parts = A Follow + 3 Meaningful Comments on my Prologue

(At the moment, my schedule does not permit me to commit myself to reading more than 5 chapters of each story. However, if you are happy with my service, I am more than happy to accept rerequests.)

Iโ€™m open to absolutely any genre although I do reserve the right to turn down your request (for example, I will not accept anything of an overly sexual nature).

To Request:

Please list the following:
:eight_spoked_asterisk: Your Name
:eight_spoked_asterisk: Story Title
:eight_spoked_asterisk: Genre
:eight_spoked_asterisk: Description
:eight_spoked_asterisk: Number of Chapter (5 Max)
:eight_spoked_asterisk: Link

I must also warn you all that my prologue is for a Star Wars Novel. So you have been warned. But if you are not a SW fan, do not let that scare you off, I appreciate any and all feedback especially from those who are not hardcore fans.

Please find it at this link: https://my.w.tt/8NOS8UlXVS

I hope you enjoy it, and I look forward to reading your stories.

Currently Reviewing:
:eight_pointed_black_star: @LinconJames - One Minute To Midnight (5 Chapters)

Waiting List:

:eight_pointed_black_star: @GhostsInsideOfMyBed - Zeitgeist (5 Chapters)
:eight_pointed_black_star: @MeredithAll - The Crime in Callahanโ€™s Morrow (5 Chapters)
:eight_pointed_black_star: @jgrace2197 - The Legend of the Moonflower Princess (Only 5 Chapters)
:eight_pointed_black_star: @sakuryox - Accidentally Bound (5 Chapters)
:eight_pointed_black_star: @bmecha - MACHINE AND MAGIC (2 Chapters)
:eight_pointed_black_star:@TheGreatSphinx - The Jewel of Florence (5 Chapters)
:eight_pointed_black_star: @sooppastar - A Cockroach in Brooklyn - A Darkly Amusing Short Story (3 Chapters)
:eight_pointed_black_star: @VanillaaJuliaa - Rosevelt (5 Chapters)
:eight_pointed_black_star: @shakespearian1 - Wing Girl for Prince Charming (5 Chapters)
:eight_pointed_black_star: @wandering1234 - The Adventures of Prince Vajendra (5 Chapters)
:eight_pointed_black_star:

Awaiting Payment:

:moneybag: @edge_meister - A Guide to Space, Time, and other Troubling Concepts (3 Chapters)
:moneybag: @Science_Meets_Magic - The Minerva Prophecy (4 Chapters)
:moneybag: @deelaveau - Undying (4 Chapters)

Review Completed:
:ballot_box_with_check: @Snirion - Macabre Marmalade (Overall Score - 29/50)
:ballot_box_with_check: @RaphaelaLee - A Super Collection of Superhero (Overall Score - 11.5/50)
:ballot_box_with_check: @Svoosh - The Song of Sqiaโ€™lon Seven (Overall Score - 34.5/50)
:ballot_box_with_check: @Booksbeneaththebed - Why Are We Young (Overall Score - 27/50)
:ballot_box_with_check: @LigerCat - Descent into Madness (Overall Score - 33/50)
:ballot_box_with_check: @Andyjo1 - โ€œThe Blood of Queensโ€ (Overall Score - 34/50)

Please be patient!


#2

Can you please review 3 chapters of A Super Collection of Superhero Flash Fiction?

Name RaphaelaLee
Story Title: A Super Collection of Superhero Flash Fiction
Genre: Superhero Humor
Description: You know every comic book hero under the sun and many are the same. A single incident changes everything. One heroine seeks justice, another hero purpose, yet another confidence, three others seek a shared loved one, one seeks to eliminate pranks, and sheโ€™s got the most experience! Yet evil will rear itโ€™s ugly head, sometimes literally, and the world will need heroes. As was the case in the stories as old as dirt itself it is sadly never easy to be a hero.

Number of Chapters 3, one will come out today

Link https://www.wattpad.com/story/167129060-a-super-collection-of-super-hero-flash-fiction


#3

Love super heroes. And love a laugh even more. I look forward to it. :+1:

ACCEPTED!

Awaiting payment.


#4

I think I did it. Let me know if you are confused on my comments, they donโ€™t meet your criteria of a meaningful comment, or you just want more information.


#5

Name GhostsInsideOfMyBed
Story Title: Zeitgeist
Genre: Romance
Description: Aaliyah Zarrenโ€™s job is in trouble.

After a mysterious scandal puts her public relationsโ€™ firm on edge, Aaliyah is one step closer to becoming unemployed.

Octavio Castellano makes a horrible decision.

Ever since he was betrayed in his last relationship, Octavio is sick and tired of deceit. He begins to question everything heโ€™s known as he harbors the loss of identity, but gains the desire for revenge and lust.

When they realize that they need each other for their jobs, the lines between their careers and personal lives are blurred to a point of no return.

Number of Chapters: 5

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/147940108-zeitgeist


#6

I am up for it!

Your Name: Snirion

Story Title: Macabre Marmalade

Genre: Science Fiction / Fantasy Science Fantasy

Description:

Three hundred years have passed since the return of magic and the great war that followed. The Earth is still very much a colossal mess. Meet Todor Corpus, a regular average guy transported into this strange future. He just wanted to make internet games but in this new world of magic, there is no internet. A horror scenario for a man such as he. So Todor decided on the most logical thing he could do, he will bring it back. And vampires, mages, and elves can go to hell.

Number of Chapters: Four published so far, that will be enough.

Link: CLICK!


#7

:eight_spoked_asterisk: Your Name: @Svoosh
:eight_spoked_asterisk: Story Title: The Song of Sqiaโ€™lon Seven
:eight_spoked_asterisk: Genre: Scifi (Short Story)
:eight_spoked_asterisk: Description: An intrepid band of space travelers, Nfrite, Serhat, and Kuma have come from their home planet to Sqiaโ€™lon Seven. They want to learn the truth about the inhabitants of their ruined sister planet. Once they hear a voice calling to them, however, their quest takes a dark turn.
:eight_spoked_asterisk: Number of Chapter (5 Max): 1
:eight_spoked_asterisk: Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/171291371-the-song-of-sqiaโ€™lon-seven

Payment is done too :slight_smile:


#8

Your Name: LinconJames
Story Title: One Minute To Midnight
Genre: Sci-Fi/ Political
Description: The book takes place in the future where the Soviet Union is restored and goes to war with the U.S
Number of Chapters (5 Max): 5, (but I would like you to skip the first chapter as thatโ€™s edited very thoroughly)
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/169969486-one-minute-to-midnight

Thank you for your time :smiley:


#9

Thanks in advance! What youโ€™re doing is awesome!


#10

That is perfect. Starting review!


#11

Who doesnโ€™t need a little romance. And a scandal! Say no more!

Accepted!

Awaiting Paymentโ€ฆ


#12

Very interesting description. Iโ€™m a big Tolkien fan, so I look forward to reading your interpretation of elves and alike.

Accepted!

Payment received!


#13

Love SciFi, and this sounds intriguing.

Accepted.

Payment received!


#14

Political intrigue, done.

Accepted!

Awaiting Paymentโ€ฆ


#15

Accepted!

And Payment received.


#16

Iโ€™ve commented on your prologue


#17

Your Name: LigerCat
Story Title: Descent into Madness
Genre: open fanfiction/sci-fi
Description: Two teenage inventors find themselves in over their heads against deadly creatures that lurk in the shadows. Trapped in a laboratory haunted by its own past, they find that itโ€™s more than just their lives at stake.
The battle against insanity may be more difficult than the battle to make it out alive.
Number of Chapter: 5 (skip prologue)
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/155001525-descent-into-madness


#18

And as soon as I get the follow, Iโ€™ll move you up the list. :+1:


#19

Looking forward to it. Love Sci-fi.

Accepted!

Payment completed!


#20

But I will come back to it once you have the third part for me.