Hi, this is my first time writing and I was wondering if someone could take a look at my blurb, please?? This is my third time writing it but I just can’t tell if it’s good enough.
"His soul is God-breathed
His mind is sacred
So how could he love me
Now I am tainted"
Nevaeh Ripley is the fruit of mental illness, born into a family divided. Crushed beneath the weight of this, the only way she can alleviate the pressure is with her pen. For years she bore the pain in silence, fighting this imperceptible opponent alone. No one ever stood in her corner.
That is, until she meets Cain.
I feel like it’s not quite right, but i don’t know how to fix. I’d appreciate any ideas!
I’d also be willing to help anyone else with theirs.