FILIPINO/PINOY WRITERS ANYONE????

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#211

That would make another great separate story cos theres so much plots in in it rn gosh i wanna finish this one already for that :sob:


#213

ngaun lng aq nabisita, dami asikaso kc


#214

Ako nga din, busy kasi pero malapit na bakasyon ika nga. Ilang kembot nalang ang ipupuhunan oks na.


#215

heheh


#216

Hello
pinoy din :smiley: kamusta


#217

hello


#218

help in what, exactly? :slight_smile:


#219

Help? :thinking:


#220

here


#221

Oh :sweat_smile: im trying to find set of rules that will exist in my book


#222

ah, any details? what have you come up with so far?


#223

Ill add ung nasa comments jan sa post ko. So far walapa masiyado :joy: di ko pa natututukan kasi di pa tumataas ung usad ng kwento


#224

Ever read Animal Farm? Ganon ba ang dating nya?
May ilang tao lang ba na may hawak sa libro? Or kabisado sya ng lahat ng tao?


#225

Im planning that the book itself is invisible. No one saw it ever. There would only be a mark para maging simbolo na natied siya sa blue book


#226

mark saan? Can you give me a short background about the story? mukhang interesting :slight_smile:

btw, sa storya ng ‘Animal Farm’, wala rin libro, nag set lang ng 7 rules yung isang baboy, kaya alng, as time went by, dinagdagan ng dinagdagan nung ibang mga baboy yung rules sa list para maging mas mataas sila kesa sa ibang mga hayop, hanggang sa huli naging mas malupit pa yung mga baboy kesa sa mga taong kumakatay sa kanila noon.
Parang ganyan yung suggestion ni @FutureInTense

Sa story mo naman, san galing yung idea ng libro? Sino lang nakakakita sa libro? Ano yun, may pinapanganak na may mark at sila lang ang nakakakita sa book?


#227

Ung mark nilalagay when the person reaches 18 years old during the Blue Rite ginagawa exactly sa bday ng person. This means that the mark can track things they do and wheter they break certain rules sa blue book. Twist is no one saw the blue book yet alam nila kung ano ang mali at tama (well, dahil sa story na to, of course innate na ung kaalaman na if u hurt others mali na un) na root na ung ganung konsepto simula nung bata pa sila with the help of school


#228

ohh… so may fixed rules sa book na hindi maaaring mabali.

closed ba yung environment/logar nila?
like for example, a city within walls, at isa sa mga rules ay bawal lumabas?

Ano nag magiging plot sa storya? Ano ang darating na problema?

And also, you said that once that mark is place on them, the teachers/professors/tao sa school would know if you break a rule, is this due to a mental connection among them?
I mean, may powers ba yung professors like in a fantasy genre
O sci-fi ba ang dating na may inilalagay palang microchip secretly sa noo nila, that can read/scan their minds?
Or is the paint thing all made up? Psychological lang ba iyon an parang placebo lang na pumipilit sa mga tao na sumunod sa kanila?


#229

Ur hitting too many points! The place is in Gennehan it is a kingdom, parliament ang government. This is magical so that mark is no joke. The mark gives you like an embedded rule para di mo mabali ang rules. (And im still working this out, may mga butas pa ung concept.) Ung mark itself ang nag ja judge sayo kung mali or tama ginagawa mo. If u break a certain rule may lalabas na kung ano sa body (idk kung anu un as of the moment) and certain things will happen


#230

nice :smiley:
hmm… suggestions…
pwedeng may point system sila, na pag bumagsak mag kakaron ng penalty
on the more magical side, pwedeng may lalabas na entity sa likod nila na ibi-bind sila - this could be before they actually do the did, iniisip pa lang alam na.
or, on the more gory side, pag masyadong masama ang ginawa nila sasabog nalang yung mark, sa noo nila.


#231

how about the plot? ano yung magiging climax sa story?
may darating ba sa lugar nila na masasamang tao? At hindi sila pwedeng lumaban dahil may mark sila, so yung mga bata ang mapipilitang lumaban para sa kanila?

or would someone from the higher ups stage a revolt and find a loop in the system? makagawa/hanap kaya sya ng exemption sa rules?

hmm…

patingin ng rules mo pag nakagawa ka na ha :smiley: