First Chapter Critiques! (Open)

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#1

Hello again everybody! I’m back with more critiques! This time because I’m pretty busy I’m only offering one chapter critiques.

My experience: I’ve been an avid reader and writer for years and have taken countless writing classes throughout my life. I’m also a reviewer for @loveeboat and their wonderful review book so I have experience reviewing work!

What I’m offering: I will read your first chapter and give you what I like, what I don’t like and suggestions on how you can improve. I will also be looking at first impressions, grammar and descriptiveness. I’m always fair, and never mean so don’t worry about that :smiley:

Payment: Yes unfortunately because I’m very busy, I’ll have to ask for payment. But don’t worry! All you need to do is read 1 chapter of one of my stories! They’re very short (< 600 words) so I don’t think it should be too much. I also have some poetry if that fits your fancy more. For poetry I require at least 4 poems to be read.

Please follow this form:
Title:
Genre:
Link:
Which story you’ll be doing for payment:

Here’s the link to my profile! Feel free to choose anything that matches you interest!
https://www.wattpad.com/user/kyrrai

I can’t wait to read your work! I hope I can help both of us become better writers!

Queue:
@JKH1010 completed
@bottle_of_rum completed
@Moosetale22 completed
@DaAngelicCreator completed
@MclaineMoran completed
@RavensOfOld completed
@RorySanders completed
@JordanJamesII payment not complete
@jgrace2197 completed
@Abigail-Lynn0 completed
@paraturtle completed
@hallonn23 completed
@MaddieChalik completed
@Ferret-bird completed
@BEHaynes completed
@WhimsicalWordsmith completed
@SpokenWhisper09 completed
@ttoteatspie completed
@DanielNgo5 completed
@nightwish435 completed
@SamandShy completed
@witchoria completed
@kkjhunter8
@GeorgeS88
@houseofmirrors
@scmimi
@Eternalautumnfire


#2

:+1:


#3

ooh i’m excited to read humor! please complete payment and i’ll get on it right away


#4

payment complete :+1:


#5

Title: Crazy Are People Too
Genre: Young adult fiction
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/182671704-crazy-are-people-too
Which story you’ll be doing for payment: Enlighten Me


#6

sure please complete payment!


#7

Payment is done, but feel free to take your time x


#8

Title, link: The Last Woman on Earth
https://www.wattpad.com/story/85944317-the-last-woman-on-earth
Description: A long time ago, there was a type of human existed in this world, and they were called ‘women’. Our generation will never know what happened. None of the remaining public documents mention why ‘women’ have gone extinct, and it seems the people of later generations have done so deliberately. And I found a so-called last of their kind.

(For context: the story is set in 1990s Russia)
Genre: Scifi, Dystopia, War novel
Story for payment: I think we’ve already agreed on another topic somewhere, and I’ve critiqued your work Jericho :stuck_out_tongue:


#9

yes! no need to do anything and i believe i’ll be reading 3-4 chapters of your work? i have a terrible memory so remind me


#10

I think it’s 3 yes :stuck_out_tongue:


#11

perfect i’ll get on that asap


#12

Title: The Academy
**Genre:**Fantasy Romance
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/181398578-the-academy
Which story you’ll be doing for payment: Jericho


#13

accepted


#14

Title: My brother’s boyfriend
Genre: LGBT, romance.
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/180665093-my-brother’s-boyfriend
Which story I will be doing for payment: I already have jericho in my reading list. So I will review that.

Please let me know if my story was accepted. And I will start with payment.


#15

accepted!


#16

Title: DOMUM
Genre: Thriller
https://www.wattpad.com/story/181279246-domum-a-tale-of-orphans
Which story you’ll be doing for payment: Jericho


#17

accepted :smiley:


#18

Done^^


#19

**Title:**Reincarnation
Genre: Thriller
**Link:**https://www.wattpad.com/story/183545896-reincarnation
Which story you’ll be doing for payment: Jericho


#20

accepted