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#61

Thank you for the Critiques :slight_smile:


#62

Title: The Sins & Secrets of Marigold Jones
Genre: Mystery
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/162629029-the-sins-and-secrets-of-marigold-jones
Which story you’ll be doing for payment: Kingdom of Ice


#63

accepted


#64

done with your chapter!


#65

done! loved it!


#66

I’d love it if you’d give my little collection a try. It is but a piece of my heart! :wink:

Title: A Piece Of My Heart
Genre: Poetry
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/179894308-a-piece-of-my-heart-poetry-and-more

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Falling in love is a process. So is falling out of it.
This collection of mine has been written slowly over the years.
It contains not only poems, but little tidbits, snippets from my diary, musings, and philosophies of what love is and of how love is bittersweet; love is not all roses and rainbows that media makes it to be.
It explores the other side of love, one that is filled with heartbreak,hope and longing for something you’ll never have.
When the soul weeps, the heart speaks… :heart: And these words are the fruit of my heart’s blood.
I hope what I write touches your hearts, burrows in and stays for life.

My collection has 38 posts :stuck_out_tongue_closed_eyes: And poem length is variable
Please let me know if you’re interested so I can do the payment!


#67

I’m game!

Title: Outrunning the Color Gray

Genre: Action (YA)

Payment: I’m realizing I’ve already read some of, “Jericho” for my own read-for-read thread…that being said, I happen to love poetry and am game to go through those!

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/183733754-outrunning-the-color-gray-a-trilogy-book-one

Description: Caleigh (Cal) has vague memories of death when a man named Artemius gives her the choice to become a guardian angel. A light-wielding being meant to protect and serve. In making this choice, she’s left with no memories of her past, save for one that she won’t recall until after her hundred years of training. Added to this, she runs the risk of dying as an angel and becoming one of the countless and isolated stars in the sky. Regardless, she agrees, and even without her memories, Cal is forced to realize that her soul remembers darkness well. As she and her partner, Allete, fight their way through training, they realize that the darkness residing in Cal may very well be her end, even before she gets to earth.


#68

Also, though you haven’t accepted, I went ahead and read some of your poems. Not trying to apply pressure, I just didn’t want to forget.


#69

accepted


#70

accepted! might take me a lil while as I’ve been super busy! i still need to read yours too


#71

how many chapters would you like me to read for the read for read?


#72

Payment complete!


#73

Done my review of yours! It was great!


#74

i read 4 of your poems! i really enjoyed them!


#75

Up to the second would be appreciated, but honestly, if you’re not digging it after the first, I understand. Just let me know why, and what I can do better!


#76

Title: The Shadow Cast Over Me
Genre: Werewolf
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/38351691-the-shadow-cast-over-me
Which story you’ll be doing for payment: Jericho


#77

sure!


#78

Hello, I have another request!

https://www.wattpad.com/story/182965135-the-colour-of-your-voice 1

THE COLOUR OF YOUR VOICE

What happens when a death row prisoner and a prostitute falls in love? A short story of mine, only 3 chapters! I hope you like it!

Genre: Romance, tragedy with elements of mental illness

Story to read: Enlighten Me :smiley:


#79

sure!


#80

done i hope this helps!