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#1

What I offer: free feedback on your first chapter/first few parts (only). this is to help you have a captivating introduction to your story, to help you get readers to stay and find out more about what happens.

What I ask for: your patience, respect. I’ll look at your books asap. no payment required

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All genres accepted (poetry included) and it can be mature books as well.

What I mostly do: look at the opening line, the ending, but also your descriptions, the dialogues. I read long chapters quickly, but nevertheless can notice details here and there.

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#2

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Link https://www.wattpad.com/story/174351589-the-lost-queen

Genre Fantasy


#4

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https://www.wattpad.com/story/135106852-project-ultron
Genre
Open Fanfiction
Anything else:
Nope


#5

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Renegades
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/160001238-renegades
Genre: Science Fiction


#6

Hello! I’d love if you looked at my story! Thank you so much! I have a short little blurb before my prologue, so please just look at the prologue instead of the blurb lol

Title: Find Me
Genre: Psychological Thriller:
Summary:When she meets his eyes, it all comes flooding back; the feeling of his hands around her throat, how hard he squeezed. But Amanda has never met this man before, and she couldn’t possibly remember…dying, could she? Is this past life real? What must she do to get away from a man who has already killed her once before?
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/167091911-find-me


#7

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Link: https://www.wattpad.com/675736251-the-record-shop-thief-wears-a-jean-jacket

Genre: Teen Fiction


#8

(the cover isn’t linking to this for some reason.)
Title: liberosis
Author: @clovdyskiies
Genre: Poetry
Blurb: “the ache to let things go, the desire to care less about things.” a collection of my poetry
https://www.wattpad.com/story/174265386-liberosis


#9

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Link: https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/174439417-resolutions
Genre: General Fiction
Anything else: This is really nice of you! :hearts:


#10

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Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/176177324-wrath
Genre: Horror, Mystery, Religious Fiction
Anything else: I only have a prologue and a first chapter, so reading them both would be great.


#11

RECAP OF WHAT I’VE READ SO FAR:

@rosebrown1k @parabare @EmilyGJones thank you for sharing your stories with me. (I left a comment on your books and wish you the best!)

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COMING NEXT:

moving to the next stories in the list now. Keep sending them my way! :blush:


#12

Thanks so much for your feedback. :slight_smile:


#13

I’m looking to have pointed out anything that doesn’t really feel like it’s needed at that point and slows the story down in that chapter (loses the readers attention). It is a character driven book and a slow burn, so things do move more slowly, but I know the first chapter is important and am looking to really give it a spark for the reader.


#14

Hi there, I just did some revisions and edits, and I’d love your feedback on the first chapter.

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Title: LEAD ME ASTRAY
Genre: LGBTQ Polyamorous Paranormal Romance

Summary: Reviewers have called it, “One of the smartest, sexiest, and most unique paranormal romances that Wattpad could possibly boast.” --The Rune Awards 2018 |

Aurie Edison shouldn’t linger in Overlay City, a mystical world of ley lines hidden within New Orleans. Luckily, there’s a seductive Empath named Mys who pledges to get her where she needs to be. Then there’s Detective Zyr Ravani, the hot werewolf tasked with keeping them safe. But what’s the worst that can happen to a Ghost?

See, Aurie’s not living her best life. But she COULD be if she accepts the powerful desire swirling between the three of them.

Ready to get away with something different? Solve Aurie’s murder with Detective Zyr Ravani and the genderqueer Mx. Mys as you fall head over heels for this threesome along the way. Go ahead. #GetAwayWithIt


#15

I accidentally deleted my comment earlier, I’ll try again :see_no_evil:
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Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/168250714-burning-gods-and-wicked-angels
Genre: mystery, fantasy
Anything else: Could you please have a look at the prologue? I recently rewrote it. Thanks for your time and help. :smile:


#16

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Link: https://my.w.tt/QANBGBvj7T
Genre: Teen-Fiction
Anything Else: None. Thank you! :blush:


#17

RECAP OF WHAT I’VE READ SO FAR:

@SpencerFantastic @toomuchtohandle21 @clovdyskiies @DeliaMaguire6 @SpencerIsaac thank you for sharing your stories with me. (I left a comment on your books and wish you the best!)

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COMING NEXT:

I’ll read the next stories in the list asap. Keep sending them!:heart:


#18

Thank you for offering this! I’d love if you took a look at the first chapter of my fantasy novel. It is rated Mature, if that is not okay, then that’s completely fine.
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Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/172573893-death’s-daughter
Genre: Fantasy
Anything else: Nope. Thank you for considering!


#19

Hello! I’d love for you to take a look at my story if the plot interests you!

Title: The Fall of Mangiatorvi
Genre: Young Adult, Fantasy
Blurb: Gemma has spent the majority of her life feeling like an outcast, struggling to hide her powers in a mortal world. Suddenly, in a whirlwind of violence that leaves her heartbroken, she is recruited to Mangiatrovi University for the Gifted. Under the dual mentorship of the crown prince and a gifted fighter with intimacy issues, she somehow manages to earn their loyalty. Tensions are rising in the government as the country is on the brink of both civil war and war with the bordering state. Gemma struggles to navigate a new world, searching for normalcy amongst friendships, romance, and politics.

https://www.wattpad.com/story/175176204-the-fall-of-mangiatorvi


#20

I would love some feedback on my story (if you enjoy reading it, feel free to keep on reading!)

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Link: https://www.wattpad.com/691606982-the-legend-of-the-moonflower-princess-where
Genre: Fantasy, High Fantasy, Epic Fantasy
Anything else: Here’s a short summary: After her adopted younger brother is kidnapped by the minions of a mad sorcerer, a young woman must journey through a magical world in order to rescue him.


#21

RECAP OF WHAT I’VE READ SO FAR:

@oliviarose85 @lesserknown1 @darvruni @RavensOfOld thank you for sharing your stories with me. (I left a comment on your books and wish you the best!)

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COMING NEXT:

I’ll read everyone else’s stories tomorrow. Until then, send them my way! :wink: