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#62

Thank you so much! Very kind of you! :smile_cat:


#63

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link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/158286677-blessed-be-thy-miracle

Anything else: Please add a tip on improving the errors you have seen if ever you see one, or rather add a tip for me to advertise it properly if you have free time. Thank you so much!


#64

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Link
Genre: Romance
Anything else: nope :slight_smile:

If you don’t have too much on your plate already, I’d love to hear what you think of my first chapter!


#65

Heya, it would be rad if you check out my book :rascal:

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Link: clicky
Genre: Romance, Action (mostly action atm)

Thank you!! :lumi:


#66

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Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/101629649-the-day-i-met-striker
Genre: Teen Fiction
Sum: ‘What do you really want from me?’ I whisper. He lifts his head from the crook of my neck, his eyes a stormy puddle of confusion.

'What I’ve always wanted, Verona." He pauses, then adds slowly, ‘You.’

‘But Striker-’ I lock eyes with him. “I’m already yours.”

Verona Bridon only has one goal in life since her mom’s death: protect her brother at all costs. Moving in with their aunt they lost contact with, they begin a new life. In a small town like Metford, Verona is confident she’ll be able to watch over him properly. But just because a town is small, doesn’t mean there isn’t trouble lurking about. Enrolling into Skye-West turns out badly when Noah accidentally becomes involved in the school leaders business.

Striker Cunningham is not one to let go of things easily- even with Noah.
What happens when Verona offers sexual pleasure in exchange for his safety? Is this deal a blessing in disguise? Can they find it in themselves to love each other through this sinful exchange?
Anything else: Thank you for doing this <3
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#67

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Title: SLICED Iron Earth
Genre: sci-fi
1 Chapter so far
Synopsis
Hadid, means iron, the only thing that can’t be sliced other than flesh, and the only thing to kill a slicer.
There is no such thing anymore, yet, giant machines made of metal and fire killed everything alive.
Fadi thinks himself is the last human on earth, he just turned 18, hiding from the machines. A girl with metallic platelets on her face appears on his radar, holding an iron gun.


#68

Title: The Kiss of Death
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Genre: Teen fiction (don’t have a good fit for it yet)
Synopsis:
“His lips look like strawberry candy dripping a sugary syrup that draws you in, only to be filled with rot on the inside.”

Two cars collide on a snowy winters night, bringing two very different worlds together. But with change comes forgetting, and forgetting is the opposite of what Garette wants.

After marrying the love of his life, Garrette finds himself on his way to their relaxing honeymoon getaway with a complimentary limo ride to the airport. But life–or death that is–has other trip ideas as the limo and Garette’s life are sent spiraling off road to end with a sudden stop.

Greeted by a glowing staircase to climb, his plans fall through as do the stairs and once again he is surrounded by darkness. The only thing that can help him get home? A man in a daisy colored suit by the name of Azrail. Swooping Garette off of his feet–literally–Azrail is more than willing to help a fellow man in need, a handsome man that is. But as Garette discovers more of the place known as limbo, he begins to forget the life he had before, even more, he begins to forget why he wanted to get back to it in the first place.

Twisted into a confusing web of lies and love, Garette must decide what path to take next all while growing far too close to the handsome man in the daisy suit.


#69

RECAP OF WHAT I’VE READ SO FAR:

@Xenoclea @PhatLyTri @RashidPrime @DA_Vritria @originalverbivore thank you for sharing your stories with me. (I left a comment on your books and wish you the best!)

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COMING NEXT:

I don’t know if I’ll have the time to read the next stories in the line today, but if I don’t… I’ll do it tomorrow. So no need to worry… and yes, you can still place a request for me to read your book.


#70

FfTitle: Letters To Noah
Author: @clovdyskiies
Genre: short story
Blurb: “I figured why not just address them to the boy I had just run into? I didn’t know you, I didn’t think you would want to know me. You were just going to be a face and a name for the stupid idea my therapist had. You were never supposed to get hurt like this…”

Rated Mature: sensitive subjects are addressed (depression, suicide, etc.)
Link: https://my.w.tt/lETfnt8LcU


#71

RECAP OF WHAT I’VE READ SO FAR:

@creakysmirk @skipabbeat @anwaAlsa @maddycole @clovdyskiies thank you for sharing your stories with me. (I left a comment on your books and wish you the best!)

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COMING NEXT:

I’ll keep this thread open for a little longer so anyone can still place a request.


#72

thankyou! :xkaydotx:


#73

Are you your services still open for today? If yes do you mind checking out this?

Title Death: Realm of me, or is it just longings for You
Blurb: The adventure of a rookie Necromancer and her first contracted human soul.
Genre: Fantasy
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/178329313-death-realm-of-me-or-is-it-just-longings-for-you


#74

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https://www.wattpad.com/594180428-sea-phoenix-chapter-one

Genre: Historical Fiction/Fantasy


#75

Thanks!:wink:

author: @besmabesma3

*book title:*Therapy sessions of an almost functioning human

genre: YA- humor

link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/173039606-therapy-sessions-of-an-almost-functioning-human

SUMMARY In which this girl tries to make her way through life while trying not to take the absurdity of existence too seriously.

"-I had a horribly busy day converting oxygen into carbon dioxide.

-Fair enough."

Here’s a little quote

I waved at her and made my way down the stairs and through the glass door of the building. I closed it, feeling the cold handle on my fingers and the crispy winter air engulf me in a warm embrace.
What a lovely day not to commit suicide, I thought to myself before heading to my house
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#76

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Link:
https://www.wattpad.com/story/177746119-my-desire

Genre:
Young adult romance

Anything else:
Thank you!


#77

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Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/175919565-because-you're-different

Genre: YA romance

What if your own body doesn’t always do what you want it to do?

For June, this isn’t a question, but a daily reality. As a fourteen-year-old with cerebral palsy, frequently dropping stuff and being stared at by complete strangers is nothing out of the ordinary. Other than that, life was great, until her parents decide to move to California.

With all her friends miles away and nobody there to protect her from boys stealing your lunch, school becomes a lot more complicated than it had been. Then, she befriends Sam Redstone, a shy boy who’d always been invisible to others.

June’s days improve drastically with Sam by her side, and when she meets his older brother Nathan, she finally believes her cousin Valentina might have been right about sexy California guys. Slowly, she and Nathan develop a unique friendship, one that, June finds herself hoping, might someday turn into something more. But as the years go by, she’s starting to think she might never be with him that way, or any other man for that.


#78

RECAP OF WHAT I’VE READ SO FAR:

@LonerWolflordjay @JesusFreak @besmabesma3 @SRoxas90 @ErinIsobelM thank you for sharing your stories with me. (I left a comment on your books and wish you the best!)

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COMING NEXT:

Keep sending requests! I’ll check them out Thursday!


#79

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/178376860-days-are-numbered
Genre: YA, Contemporary
Description: Living in the fast lane is getting kind of lonely.

People live. People die. But they have numbers on their wrist; the years left in their lives. When it turns to 0, you’re a walking time bomb.

Anything else: Only the first chapter (minus the foreword) is up, this is my very first story so I’m still a little uncertain. Thank you so, so much for doing this!


#80

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Author’s name @PiotrRad
Title Gods, demons and customs of the ancient Slavs
Genre History
Brief summary The book is not just a book describing the adventures of a hero. It is a work that helps to understand the Slavic world and its worldview. He acquaints us with the deities of ancient peoples and tries to explain their place and role in the life of society. It also touches upon the aspect of Christianization of Slavic peoples in a non-peaceful way.

The multitude of deities and demons may inspire not one writer to write something unique.
Link (https://www.wattpad.com/664817944-gods-demons-and-customs-of-the-ancient-slavs )


#81

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Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/153158425-the-girl-from-swan-lake
Genre: teen fiction

anything else: thank you :slight_smile: