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#188

Hi I like your summary, it’s the complete set, it has the irony in a story, the sarcasm, drama and love. Which many can relate to in a story like yours. It has sustenance, and it sounds fun. I give you a 9.6/10 :black_heart::shushing_face:

TITLE: LEGEND OF D.A.R.K.E.S.S.

SUMMARY:

“It was the age of the apocalypse and the beginning of the end. Long ago there lived a boy who came to possess 5 powers. Afraid of what he had become, unknown to the mysteries of the world around him. He didn’t know what awaited him at the dawn of that time, whether he would become a devil or perhaps a God. But, sometimes there are mysteries that can’t wait for no one, and only in the shadows can he be sure to find the answers he was always searching for.”

“Much time has passed, perhaps centuries, years and lifetimes. Not much was known about that time in history, except what lay in the darkness, where no light was ever found piercing the world. True peril laid awake in the night, in the dreams and hearts of many.”

“Now Ray a young boy in search for his place in the world, as lost as the past, looking at every turn and only to come on empty. Being only 16 and soon to turn 17, he never thought that he would leave the home he knew, and only to be taken from the new home he barely knew. Taken by strangers and driven afraid, alone, in the night, in the dark. What hope could he find in the hands of others, in the darkness, in fear and perhaps even despair.”

I rewrote my summary from the one before, let’s hope this one is better than the last one I wrote. :kissing:


#189

7.5/10

I think your summary is intriguing and very mysterious. Anything that mentions humans with powers gets my attention tbh. However, I personally think the second paragraph is unnecessary and the third paragraph could be shortened because the key part is when you mention Ray was taken by strangers. But overall, I like it.

Break My Heart

When Freya Liu-Hampton moved to America to stay with her Aunt (her parents decided her education was a priority so went globetrotting without her), she didn’t expect to become best friends with Dale Sampson, otherwise known as the school’s uber intelligent popular boy who, for some reason, can’t seem to find The One. Now two years down the track and after several failed romantic relationships, Dale asks Freya for an impossible favour: to help him find his soulmate.

Problem is, she doesn’t believe in them and really isn’t up for the task.

Well, that is until 1) she figures out that his older brother has a crush on her which she wants eliminated immediately and 2) she crosses paths with someone who kind of changes her mind about this whole soulmate thing.


#190

8.5/10

Your summary was good and hooked me, which is what you want from a summary. The part in brackets is unnecessary, it added to much background story to the summary. Also, I believe the first paragraph is just one big run-on. Lastly, the points could be listed as an actual list to make it more visually pleasing. Ex:

Well, that is until:

  1. She figures out that…
  2. She crosses path with…

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Make Your Move

Zandria Racheal wants to be just like every other teenager, but sadly she isn’t. She is top of her class and still somehow manages to stay popular. Maybe it’s because of her currently trending YouTube channel with two million subscribers.

Everybody knows this side of Zandria: the bubbly, entertaining teenager.

But, the darkness is unknown.

Day after day Zandria and her brother Keith are abused by their unforgiving mother. With a Father constantly away on business, Zandria has made it her duty to look after her little brother who is also dealing with anxiety. She wishes that one day someone will ask, “how are you?” and her reply will not be a lie.

Then, there is Dennis Ridge, the nerd. Dennis enjoys lunch by himself in a corner and finds pleasure in writing under a tree in the schoolyard. No one really talks to him and for years he has been trying to figure out why. His parents aren’t the worst and actually, care about their child. Little do they know that Dennis is finding life hard to deal with. He hopes one day he can find the definition of happy.

It has been written in Wattpad cliché-ness that these paths will cross. But, I promise you their journey together will not be cliché.

Join Zandria and Dennis through the ups and downs of a complicated teenage life.


#191

Thank you for your pointers! I’ll be taking them on board :slight_smile:


#192

9/10 Your 1st paragraph caught my attention. I’m curious to know more about Zandria. And I haven’t come across much stories about YouTube. I just felt you didn’t need to mention anything about cliches.

The Element of Life

I was hoping seventeen would be the perfect age. Buying a new jeep on my birthday was an amazing experience that any girl could hope for, but that was nothing compared to dealing with an ex-boyfriend trying to make my life miserable, facing an eating disorder, and trying to overcome the fact that my father left us when I was younger. I suppose it’s good to have friends by your side even if it’s just one.

Life changed that fateful day when I noticed a strange light in the park. My poor judgement told me to visit the park and I did. Little did I know that touching that light would give me a power. An element if you will. I had the power to bring things back to life. My powers could grow a tree within seconds. This new power completely changed my life. Who could I trust with this new power? Could I even trust myself?


#193

I like the concept of it but I believe the blurb is poorly written. It doesn’t seems like a summary and ending your summary with a question is never a good idea. Try changing it by getting ideas from the internet and from other books. 6/10


The Heartbreaker

“She belonged to no boy,
only to herself.”

Losing parents at sixteen is a baggage no teenager should ever have to carry but Amber White still did.

She had to grow up earlier than her classmates. One year later and she is already working on a part-time job, handling school and finding a way to sustain herself along the way.

But when her best friend’s heart is shattered, she decides to break the boy who did that to her.

Rumors spread fast and suddenly, Amber sees a way of gaining money for her university fund. Girls, from many schools, would actually pay her to avenge their broken hearts.

Everything is perfect until the bitchy queen bee from her school, Megan Waldorf, asks her to absolutely smash the golden’s boy heart.

The money is good but there’s only one problem.

Kyle Gray turns out to be the hardest boy she had ever needed to take down.


#194

Even though I love the concept, the summary is not doing it for me. The first phrase just doesn’t fit the summary. Overall great concept and a fresh one at that! Good luck!
7/10

Brown haired Thief

“When life doesn’t give you lemons, just steal them.”

Raine Vierra stole to survive. Moving to a new town she wanted to stay low-key to hide the ugly truths of her past, but her life alters the day she steals a stone from the Wilkinson’s.

Meeting potential criminals or messing up with them was not something of her concern. It changed the day when Sky Wilkinson, Exhart High’s very own bad boy, hit her with a football.
With Sky and his best friends in her life, she could only do so much to hide from her past.

It’s true when they say “One truth can change it all.” And only one truth is what lies between them too.
Lies, betrayals, heartbreaks, cheaters, troublemakers, new relationships and a lot more is on the ride to finding the truth.


#195

9/10, I really like the concept. The only thing I don’t really like is the formatting of the sentence “With Sky and his best friends…” because I’m not sure if it’s a new paragraph or goes with the second paragraph. Either way it doesn’t hinder my enjoyment of the summary at all; it was just a little mistake.


Runaways

Aurora Evans’s life has been spiraling downward ever since she was twelve, when she witnessed her mother’s murder and her father was then arrested for a crime he regrets. All in two weeks. After those two weeks, her life becomes a blur of courtrooms, social workers, foster families, and group homes.

After five years of being in the foster system, she is sent to another foster family who can only be good or worst for her. For weeks or months on end, Aurora barely survives from the bruises, hits, nightmares, and grueling hours of work, only collapsing from exhaustion.

On the anniversary of her mother’s murder, Aurora has had enough. One more bruise, one more hit, and she packs up a bag and escapes through her bedroom window.

She walks the city of Seattle for hours, only one person in mind.

Easton Hughes never expected to see his former best friend from a group home outside his apartment window, bruises on her skin and a plan to run away forming at the back of her mind. All Easton wants to do is comfort Aurora and change her mind, but she’s adamant about her plan.

With a few spare belongings and a barely-functioning car, the two embark on a trip that would include cheap motels, creepy gas stations, and late night talks.


#196

9/10 ahhh I love this!! I think I’ll check your story out, just because this description really got me. The only thing that makes it a 9 and not a 10 was in the second paragraph (second line) I think it should be ‘worse’ not ‘worst’. Also, the very last line isn’t exactly gripping enough for me, and I think there should be some kind of drama or shock factor added. Something that will leave the readers on a cliffhanger or give them a sense of some conflict going along with Easton and Aurora’s trip. Just a suggestion, but I think altogether it’s really good!

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Yours Truly, Ramona

Ramona and her little brother were supposed to stick together. That was the promise that they’ve stuck to their entire lives. From corrupt foster homes to even more corrupt foster parents, it’s always been Ramona and little eight-year-old Mason, the two kids that stick together like glue.

But, unfortunately, life doesn’t abide by the rules of a child, and the very people Ramona has instilled even the slightest bit of trust in have found a way to betray her.

People like Owen Parker, the doctor Ramona trusted to treat her little brother’s sprained wrist last year.

But Owen Parker had other plans, and one year later he’s managed to dig his way back into Ramona and Mason’s lives, only to separate the two of them and send Ramona’s entire world into a downwards spiral of hatred, betrayal, and a hell of a lot of drugs.

Brotherless, parentless, and alone in the city of Portland, Ramona has to find a way to cope, and she has to find a way to forgive the man who took her little boy from her.

But Ramona can’t cope, she can’t forgive, and she can only bend so many times before she breaks.


#197

Thank you!


#198

9/10 I love your first paragraph and how I instantly this story has to do with siblings. Of course, as I continue to read the summary, I’m left wondering about the parents. Where are the parents? I know it says ‘parentless’ in the second to last paragraph, but why are they parentless? I think it’s a good thing that you don’t go into detail about the parents.

The Element of Life
I was hoping buying a new jeep for my seventeenth birthday would be the start to a great year. Things were looking up until I caught my ex-boyfriend Elliot cheating on me at Prom. It didn’t help that I was already facing an eating disorder and trying to overcome the fact that my father left us when I was younger. Thankfully I had my best friend Regina with me at my side.

Life changed that fateful day when I noticed a strange light in the park. My poor judgement told me to visit the park and I did. Little did I know that touching that light would give me a power. An element if you will. I had the power to bring things back to life. This new power completely changed my life. I wasn’t sure if I could trust anyone with my new power.

At best my secret was probably safe with Regina. But Elliot was a different story. In fact, he was already out to make my life miserable. There would be no telling what Elliot would do if he ever knew the truth. The fate of the world was in my hands.


#199

6/10. It sounds more like a blurb than a summary, and I’m not exactly sure what the book is about.

The Playwright’s Prince

15-year-old Sam Tucker is the embodiment of a bad boy. He may be confident and reliable with the ladies (and gentlemen), but he has soft spot for theater. When a late arrival to history class lands him in detention, Sam crosses paths with Luke Emerson, who happens to be an aspiring playwright. Luke’s searching for the perfect muse for his play, and Sam is exactly what he’s looking for.


#200

9/10 I like the summary! It seems a bit vague, but I like vague considering I dont want to know everything about about right off the bat.

Clover Dahlia is someone Arsen Hopkins would never touch. Shy and discreet she keeps to herself being at the top of her class. While he was outgoing and everyone knew his secrets.

Though their story starts when Arsen has to pair up with her for a video project. He doesn’t want to do it, but slowly as he spends more time with her, he realizes there is more to her shy exterior.


#201

4/10. Seems really cliche and I see some punctuation mistakes. You should also explain why he would never touch her.


Anna and November had only known each other for a few short months, but nevertheless had grown strong feelings for each other in no time at all.

Nova was just a shy girl from a small town but with a push from Anna, she goes on all sorts of wondrous adventures, ranging from exploring mountain tops to talking until sunrise on Anna’s roof. November quickly realized she was falling for Anna, although she couldn’t deny that there was something mysterious about her.

She quickly realizes that the truth can be bitter.

November’s life is shattered by a haunting revelation as Anna’s secret is discovered through tragedy. Suddenly November is caught between the feud of two opposing vampire clans and struggles to stay united with her love.

Who knew one kiss could be so dangerous?

◤ in which two girls fall in love, die, and fight anyone who gets in the way of each other. ◢


#202

8/10, it seems really thought out, and the majority of it is really working well except for when you mention that Nova is falling for Anna. Sort of a show-don’t-tell thing, if that makes sense. Dance around the bush, no matter how negative the connotation is for that phrase.
wow, i’m a hypocrite haha.
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Hailey Wilson appears to be what some people call a child prodigy, yet despite her extensive capability for knowledge, many avoid her like the plague— simply because of her daring personality and dark sense of fashion.

Despite her stereotypical exterior, Hailey has the ability to— with a simple glance— easily discover how dangerous someone can be to her or people close to her. To her, a newborn baby ranks a one out of ten in comparison to a trained sniper, who would rank a seven.

She’s never seen anyone rated above a five— until he came along.

When Kane Westcott strides in with a glimmering ten out of ten practically branded on his forehead, Hailey’s left shocked and confused as his smile entrances her and his number frightens her.


#203

9/10

You have me intrigued from the beginning, but I’m confused about whether or not how different she compared to others who might have “gifts” , especially if the story is not set in the real world.

Getting Maria Right (Unpublished)

Three stories, two sides one play.

At Rose Thomas High school, the drama program is getting ready for the production of West Side Story and junior girls Sonya and Liza are up for the leading role of Maria.

When the casting list comes out, it sparks racial tensions and the school becomes a war ground. Friendships are tested, love is shattered and lives are changed, for better or worse.

Told in the perspective of the two girls and the drama teacher, this three part novel will dig deep into the trouble of racism, prejudice and what you would do to achieve your dreams.


#204

Are you allowed to post your description twice to get different opinions?


#205

I love the title of your story. Very catchy.

I really like the first paragraph. The sound of a hostage situation sounds very gripping. I’m not sure about the school’s name as it sounds like a person and is a little confusing (that might just be personal taste).

I found the second paragraph rather long and confusing and the ‘since Issac’ being put twice, a little repetitive. I would suggest perhaps making it more punchy with shorter paragraphs like: “She’s known Issac Crawford all her life and he’s in Elanor’s inner circle. Since her boyfriend was expelled, Issac is dubbed ‘king’ and her ‘male counterpart’, but he is responsible for the tragedy, the human reminder of all she has lost. With him sitting within her inner circle, all sense of pleasantry goes out the window.”

Its the same with the third paragraph. Who is Ansel? I’m still unsure how relevant her boyfriend being expelled is. I like the ending that their friendship is what will save the day.

How about flipping the blurb into reverse:

Ansel Redwood arrives with challenging plans for the royal circle. How will Elanor cope with her boyfriend expelled and society dubbing Issac as King or her male counterpart; Issac Crawford the human reminder of all she has lost. However, if Elanor and Issac fail to work together they risk losing the only thing uniting seven stubborn heads - friendship.

Jewel of the sea

One kiss is all it took to wake Mariah’s weather manipulation powers.

"Don’t kiss him! Warned Gwyn, famous for her fortunetelling skills. But, fate has a funny way of making things happen that even Gwyn’s magic cannot stop.

Mariah is crushing on her best friend, rivalling with the swim team star and with no idea what she is… this mermaid could take someone’s human life.


#206

Whoops, I think I commented on the wrong blurb or took too long writing. I should be reviewing your blurb.

The title is okay. The burb is awesome. This really good. Its straight to the point and clear what it is about. Hats off to you for tackling such a tricky topic. I hope you keep writing this as it sounds like it will be brilliant.


#207

Yes, you are. Just make sure you’re rating the person above you first (: