8/10. It’s interesting, but it’s a little confusing and it’s short.
The Playwright’s Prince
15-year-old Sam Tucker is the embodiment of a bad boy. He may be confident and reliable with the ladies (and gentlemen), but he has soft spot for theater. When a late arrival to history class lands him in detention, Sam crosses paths with Luke Emerson, who happens to be an aspiring playwright. Luke’s searching for the perfect muse for his play, and Sam is exactly what he’s looking for.
8/10. I like it, and would probably read it. I like how it’s a little different from other ‘bad boy’ stories. Good job!
Till Tomorrow Comes:
Everyone in the small town of Marion has heard about the incident involving Vincent Grey. Fazed words float around that name, bringing up unwanted memories from the past. The Grey family. Once so perfect and happy, now a total and utter disaster.
Adding onto this miserable chain of self-assumptions is Mavis Grey, seen by the world as the poor girl stuck in her brother’s dark shadow. She’s sarcastic, cautious, and just an ordinary girl trying to get through her last year of high school without any problems.
One not so good phone call leads to the teenage girl running into a tall, broad-shouldered boy from the bad part of town, ink plastered across his skin like a canvas. He’s Aspen Myers, the towns delinquent. Girls swoon over him while trying to keep their distance, you can always hear his name floating around the ghostly halls of Oakmont High.
Uneventful days pass and soon enough the two begin to get closer, falling away from their old lives for just a second. But one thing leads to another and soon enough the secrets that were meant to be kept hidden fall into the wrong hands. Mavis realizes that the stories she was told years ago were never true and that the person she loved was constantly hiding behind an innocent mask made by the people she was closest to.
The same thing happens every day in the same old town of Marion. Long days continue to stretch across the horizon as Mavis wonders if tomorrow will ever come.
There’s a lot of filler here. Most summaries aren’t longer than two or three paragraphs. Stuff like:
It’s all filler. There’s so much here about the descriptions of the characters without much of the plot. I’d like more about what the book is actually about. I get that the Grey family is a disgrace, and that Mavis wants to get away from this, and that she meets Aspen and I guess they fall in love, and you allude to a possible conflict, but I as a reader want to know the conflict. As for what’s good about this, I really like the first like, as well as the last paragraph, and the paragraph about Mavis is actually really good; we get a clear sense of who she is, and what she wants.
Three Evils of Orchard Catholic
Amel Moon didn’t know what she was getting into when she decided to do her history project about the three deaths that had occurred at Orchard Catholic, her Catholic boarding school in Middle-of-Nowhere, Minnesota.
Timothy Ferns was murdered in 1978 and has picked up a reputation as the Poplar Tree Ghost around campus ever since. He never expected someone to be interested in his murder, and whilst his two friends and fellow ghosts, Aleksander Kozlov and Anders Hanson, aren’t too keen on the idea of helping Amel with her history project, he takes a liking to her.
But the townsfolk weren’t too kee on the murders when they happened, and they’re even less so now. Maybe some ghosts just deserve to be left alone.
The first paragraph grabbed my attention. Just the though of deaths occuring at a religious boarding school… gives me the shivers.
The second sentence in the second paragraph was hard to follow. I read it a couple of times. It could be because you’re introducing two more characters and then jumping back to Timothy (he takes a liking to her). I would probably reorder the sentence or break it up.
“But the townsfolk weren’t too keen” feels quite weak. How did it show that they weren’t keen on it? Why wouldn’t they want to uncover the truth?
Love the last sentence.
Waiting for My World to Change
When star soccer player Derek Seymour takes a prank too far, he’s forced to join the misfits of the school poetry club. He expects to hate every minute of it, all while keeping his dysfunctional family life a secret. What he doesn’t expect is to meet Jae, a transfer student who teaches him to forgive his past and love.
Jae Oakland is haunted by memories of people who have left her. When her mother dies, she moves in with her rich and overbearing uncle in Blue Bay. At the school’s first poetry club meeting, she runs into Derek Seymour, the obnoxious jock who’s already threatening her reputation. Can she learn to trust and love again after losing everything?
6/10 I like the idea but for the summary, that’s too short. Also, it doesn’t tell much about the plot and characters, which is something that should make the readers interested about the story.
The Lies That We Tell
Quentin Adams has been in love with his best friend for years. And although their happily ever after happens only in his dreams, he’s not one to give up. For so long, he had been willing to do anything to make his dreams come true and never had he even thought about anyone else.
But everyone has a breaking point. And unfortunately, after seeing the love of his life with someone else, he’s beginning to lose hope. Now, after years of waiting for impossible, he’s ready to move on. Find someone else. Be happy. But while trying to do that, he starts to realize that it’s harder than it sounds.
Later he finds himself trapped in a situation with an unexcepted stranger who might as well be what he never knew he needed. It’s now up to Quentin himself if he’s ready to take a risk and get his heart broken again.
This sentence specifically “He may be confident and reliable with the ladies (and gentlemen), but he has soft spot for theater.” doesn’t make any sense.
The sentence implies that being confident with flirting/dating means you can’t like theatre - and that’s completely false.
If you said something like “He may be confident and reliable with the ladies (and gentlemen), but when you put him on a stage in front of an audience, he can’t get a word out.” This works because confidence and nervousness are opposites connected by the “BUT”
So now working with what you have here so far, I’d edit your blurb to something like this…
High school freshman (or sophomore) Sam Tucker is the embodiment of a bad boy - and bad boys don’t join drama club! So despite having a secret soft spot for theatre, Sam settles on creating real life drama wherever he goes. One day it might be a cat fight between two girls he’s dating, while another it might be (insert another bad boy thing).
When arriving late to history class lands Sam in detention, his path crosses with fellow student and aspiring playwright Luke Emerson. Luke’s been searching for the perfect muse for his play, and Sam is exactly what he’s looking for. (Now you have to insert the obstacles in the way of their goals - maybe it is that Sam has stage fright and then you could use the confidence versus nervousness bit)
For the next reviewer please review @emliarad - this blurb i posted is not for review, it is just a suggested edit to help @bluespringlife
10/10 Yes, I really like that summary. It’s concise and filled with emotion, letting us know it’s going to be a read that will get our feels going and make us sad and then happy, with lots of tugs at our hearts on the journey. I also like that it’s about a boy, I love reading and writing the boy’s view. It sheds a whole different light on relationships! Very nice!
UNTIL/ in progress …
Amber, fresh out of high school and in the big city now, a girl destined for far more than she ever could have imagined. Tony, the estranged son of a billionaire, living a life most people can only dream about, but trapped in a nightmare of inner demons and real life drama right off the front pages.
Amber Scott moves to New York City to attend college, never dreaming that meeting a boy could change her whole life in an instant. Everything she knew and believed about herself and her life are different now as she focuses her every move on winning the heart of the boy she now knows she is destined to live for.
"I don’t remember when I fell in love with Tony Glissando. Perhaps it was that day in Central Park when he was playing football with his cousin Gianni. Tony noticed me, out of all the people there, missed catching the ball, and acted like I was the most beautiful girl he’d ever met. Or maybe it was that night we first went out, when he kept flirting with Maria, that girl from Little Italy, and I got so jealous I knew I had to be in love with him already. Or maybe it was that time … "
I don’t really get this last paragraph, is it part of the summary? If it’s a part of the story, I suggest you don’t put it on the summary, it gives away practically the whole plot. I’m sorry but I don’t really your story at all. It’s too cliche. A rich playboy that has dark secrets meets the good girl. Try change the plot and maybe your summary as well. What if the girl was rich and she met a broken boy? It would much more interesting. 4/10
How bad can a good girl get?
With her entire future planned detail by detail and an abusive dad, all Adelina Baker wants is to protect her little brother, do things that she never thought she would and maybe try to discover her true self along the way. And who better to teach her some bad things than the school’s bad boy himself?
Damien Stone has everything that it’s needed to be a bad boy. From a smirk that could make any girl fall over heels for him to his cocky and dangerous personality, he’s definitely not a person to mess with.
They make a dangerous deal that can change both of their lives forever. All he asks is for one kiss to give her what she wants. With that, Damien will do everything in his power to teach Adelina, turning the two-goody-shoes into a bad person just like him. It’s a part of their deal after all.
But can they find beauty in darkness? Or has the bad boy created someone worst than himself?
Judging the summary it self only, I’d personally give it a 7/10
I think it’s quick, concise and to the point. It gives you enough details to pull you into the story but leaves out enough that it leaves the reader wondering what else is going to happen. I think you did a good job
“Mariana García was well on her way to senior year with a spot on the school’s newspaper, impeccable grades, and a shot at her dream job to become a journalist…that is until a lone sheet of paper finds its way into her locker.
With a peculiar sketch penciled in, and an anonymous lover’s words at the bottom, Mariana’s life takes a turn for the unexpected as she falls into the trance of these anonymous sketches, eventually having her take a step back into the past.
Trinity High’s star baseball catcher Yadier Martinez wants nothing more than to lead his team back into the playoffs and a last chance at a championship title, but with senior year edging its way closer, he realizes that it’s also his final chance to fix forgotten links and to take a stand for what he believes in before it’s too late.
Life in high school is what you make of it, and Trinity High’s students are about to find out.”
7.8/10 You had an interesting start on the two paragraphs which drew me in. I believe adding the third paragraph is unnecessary since it throws the tone of the story off. Overall, the idea of it is well put together.
How to NOT be a Virgin
Rule # 1 - Never tell anyone your a virgin
Rule # 10 - Hang out with male friends.
Rule # 36 - Watch porn with teenagers.
Daisy Moreno is just the average teenager who follows every rule in the book. Not until her senior year where she decides that it’s time for a change. She meets a circle of new friends who are very open to explicit activities. Since loosing one’s virginity seems to be a hot topic, Daisy often finds herself in awkward situations she’s never been in before. To cover it up, she tells everyone otherwise.
On her epic journey through high school, Daisy will learn to find herself as an individual and where she fits in the world while facing the reality of major issues and responsibilities.
3/10 The idea seems very similar to a lot of stories on here, revolving around good high school girls losing their virginity. There are also a lot of trite phrases (“average teenager” “follows every rule in the book” “time for change” “find herself”), as well as awkward wording and grammar problems. In revisions, I would suggest highlighting the parts of your book that make it unique, and really making your writing style and character voice shine. Also, it could use a grammar polish up.
Whatever Souls Are Made Of
In 57 days, Samoa Kent will receive her soulmark: a pattern that appears on your eighteenth birthday, distinct to you and your soulmate. And even though Cosmopolitan magazine says the odds of knowing your soulmate are about the same as getting hit by lightning while simultaneously eaten by land sharks, Sam knows in her bones that she and Will Monterey are destined to be together. Too bad he can’t take his eyes off her best friend.
Sam’s plan was to wait until her eighteenth birthday, when she was sure the stars would align. But when Will confesses that he’s in love with her friend, Sam realizes she has to act fast.
Enter Israel Fisher. He tells Sam that the only way to make Will notice her is to date somebody else. Of course, he didn’t mean himself, but in Sam’s eyes, he’s the perfect candidate— not interested, not her type, and Will’s least favorite person. Best of all, Israel never got a soulmark, so there’s no chance of things getting serious.
With 57 days and counting, Sam and Israel go all out. They’re so convincing, Sam herself starts to wonder what’s real and what isn’t. Suddenly, she’s in a situation she never imagined: falling for someone who has no chance of being her soulmate. Will she be smart and play it safe, or will she finally be bold enough to go after what she wants— regardless of the consequences?
10/10 OHMY!!! I WANT TO READ YOUR BOOK! This is so interesting! I LOVE books that have to do with soulmates, but you gave it a twist, she’s falling for one who is not a soulmate, supposedly… Well job in writing something so enticing! I will for sure be looking for your book.
Loving Ivy’s Colorful Mind
I saw her, but she never saw me.
No matter what I did to break through her crystal globe of her mind, she still didn’t see me. I loved her from afar, more than I have ever, or could ever love someone. I loved her even though we have never exchanged a single word. I loved her because I could see how she saw the world differently. I was IN LOVE with her, because she WAS different. Just like me…
I was obssessed with her. I wanted to see her finally seeing ME. Because those dark and haunting eyes of hers, have been the first and last picture in my head, every day, for years.
Ivy’s mind is a mystery to me, and I want to uncover it, solve her.
I am in love with Ivy’s mind. I just hope one day I get to tell her, and she lets me love her the way only I could…
Ivryl “Ivy” Tesla is perfectly happy in her colorful little world which involves a stable and predictable routine, her twin and older brothers, and her two best friends from infancy. There’s the occassional darkness, but with Gabe, Dami, Mav and Ry by her side, she can overlook the darkness lurking in the shadows of her crystal globe. They are all she ever wanted, all she could ever care for and all she could ever need. That is, until one night she is saved by an unknown stranger.
Once Ivy acknowledges Liam Price’s existence in her perfect little world, she witnesses how little by little her crystal globe starts to shatter. She resists, but he is persistent. He purposely forces himself into her world, and soon she finds out that it was not as perfect or colorful as she had believed it to be.
In the end, Liam might just be the one to uncover her deepest secrets and darkest demons, but also, the only one who could force her into a world of the brightest colors… A world she didn’t even know it existed inside her mind… inside her own heart.
Okay. So. First of all, I find the summary to be quite long. Fret not, because it’s a common thing to do. I’ve done it before and probably will end up doing it again. It happens to everyone. Second, I find the first part of the blurb to be, uh… rather stalkerish. I don’t know, it just made me uncomfortable, and I believe that you want the exact opposite, considering the second part of the summary. Now, I myself am not someone who loves cheesy romance, but I believe that even from an impartial point of view, the second part is still a bit too corny for my taste, what with the imagery and all. And also, a conflict I have with your blurb, is that regardless of how long it is, I still feel like I know close to nothing about your story. From what I read, I can just tell that Ivy is a girl who meets a seemingly stalkerish guy that forces a romance between them and eventually helps her fight her demons, but what else? Other than that, I believe it’s a good summary. 6.5/10
Of Attraction & It’s Collateral Damage
When Alexander Raines’s overprotective parents finally agree to let the 17-year old go on his prestigious school’s annual Junior two-month trip to Germany, he imagines a summer full of laughs, adventures and well-deserved independence next to his beautiful best friend, Madeleine. What he doesn’t expect is the frustration and confusion that both Gene —his annoyingly charming and risk-seeking roommate— and Mads —the fun and unpredictable girl whom he’s known for all his life— cause day after day.
All while hell breaks loose in Mapleton Academy’s trip throughout Europe that Alexander’s sure will change his life forever; but not without a nonstop dose of the hazardous games of jealousy, snob gossip, teenage angst and petty drama, of course. Because when it comes to teenage attraction, it’s all fun and games till someone gets gets hurt.
Okay, so, I’m terrible with summary’s, always have been, but I will give this my best shot.
I like this. It lets us know who is involved in the story, and a general idea of what is going on.
This seems to start a bit weird. It seems like its running off the first part, but how it’s written is very jarring. The whole first sentence of this seems a bit off, though that could just be me. I’d say rethink how this part is written.
Other than that, it seems like it would make a good summary 7/10
If Walls Could Talk
‘The decision to live a dream, or keep facing reality seems easy enough, but if you had that choice, what would you choose? The perfect paradise, or the trial of life? It seems easy enough. But dreams are often twisted and misconstrued; like a rumour; they could start out innocent enough, but put it on repeat, and you’ll start to notice the changes.’
Louis Stan had always been an outcast. There was no denying that the walls he had put up between himself and other people was the cause of this but being gay hadn’t helped either. However, being an outsider wasn’t his only problem.
Louis had always tried to see the light, even in the darkest times, but with each passing day, it got harder. He becomes more closed off. Not letting the light reach him.
But sometimes a voice is all we need to hear.
As the soft voice of a caring boy slips through his bedroom wall, Louis finds himself seeing little bits of that light again. But with it, Louis notices the darkness from the past, that he tried to move on from, starts to become illuminated.
Will this mystery boy help Louis bring down his walls, or will the past continue to haunt him?