8/10 Okay if I’m being honest, it’s really good, overall. This makes me want to check it out, and I hope it’s been posted because I’m actually interested. I just have a few comments/questions that maybe could be clarified. 1 - why would kit disguise himself as a human if being a human would make him get treated badly? Wouldn’t he want to be his normal, android self so that he can enjoy being a free citizen? 2 - what makes the androids and humans different from each other? What are the androids? Are they machines that look like scrap metal or do they have a human-like appearance? If they look like humans, how do people know if they’re an android or a human? Consider possibly answering some of these questions to make it a little more clear, but also make sure not to give away too much because it’s good to leave readers asking questions. Also check the genre. This sounds more like science fiction than teen fiction. Overall it did catch my attention as a reader, and science fiction isn’t even a genre that I like, so well done.
Yours Truly, Ramona
Life doesn’t abide by the rules of a child. Sixteen-year-old Ramona knows this. She’s seen it throughout her entire life, from the way she was treated by her parents to the way she was thrown around the foster system with nothing but her little brother, Mason, to hold onto. It’s always been just Ramona and Mason, no parents to depend on, and no place to truly call home.
That is, until Ramona gets news one day that may just uproot everything she’s ever believed about her and Mason’s situation. A man named Owen Parker has stepped into the picture, and he wants to take the only thing that Ramona has ever truly loved. He wants to adopt her brother, and there is nothing she can do to stop him.
Though after sixteen years of running, and sixteen years of pain, it may just be the very thing that little Mason needs. It’s a breath of fresh air for him, a family filled with love, and everything that Mason has never had.
But then, what about Ramona?
She’s brotherless, parentless, and alone in a city that has never cared about her. She has to find a way to cope, and she has to find a way to forgive the man who took her little boy from her. But she can’t cope, she can’t forgive, and she can only bend so many times before she breaks.