6/10 for the blurb - When I read the second line of it “1 goes into 5” I was thinking that she ends up hooking up with all five of them, but that’s not right, because one is her brother. So … that’s where my mind went right off the bat, which led me to be taken out of your blurb.
I think the last line is also confusing - 22-year-old version. Does that mean she’s 22 now? or she’s 16? What perspective are we seeing this from? I think once these are cleaned up, I’ll actually probably like the blurb. I’m a sucker for girls raised beside boys stories (mostly because all of my friends growing up were guys). I’ll check out your work!
Carter Ortese is Trouble
Everyone knows Carter Ortese, or Carter “Oh Tease” as some girls call him.
Everyone knows Carter Ortese’s dad died at seventeen after getting his mom pregnant.
Everyone knows Carter Ortese is trouble.
Which is why, during a school lunch in the spring, it makes no sense that Emma Williams, the girl who has everything going for her, would sit across across from him in the cafeteria and ask him out on a date. Realizing that she’s asking on a dare, Carter says yes. Even though Emma assumed Carter would reject her, she’s not one to back down now.
No one knows why Emma actually goes on the date.
No one knows why Emma goes on a second date.
Emma realizes: No one knows the real Carter Ortese.