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#3762

I wrote another chapter but honestly fight scenes are a pain and people are gonna hate em but oh well


#3763

I looove a fight scene :muscle:t3::muscle:t3::muscle:t3:


#3764

Yeah? I am around once a day and the progress this thread has made me utter ‘whoa!’


#3765

Ohhhhh makes sense! But, like was their book poorly written or something. Sorry, I just read the review now and I had added that book to my library, so I was just wondering


#3766

I love to write fight scenes as well (the verbal kind). There’s so much matter to spice things up.


#3767

WELL don’t expect much from this one cries


#3768

Wanna know how I write mine?!


#3769

I think the readers picked that cover because the story is about a woman- an actress- trapped in an abusive relationship and all of the trials that come into her life when one of her co-stars in a show begins to ask too many questions. So, while the book has its sex scenes and moments, it’s very much a romantic thriller.

But on Wattpad as I mentioned to LizLane, sultry sells better on this site lol I also just think this new one is more eye-catching at the end of the day. :slight_smile:

Thanks for listening to me ramble :joy: Hows your day going?


#3770

Yes!! Take advice from Mills, hers are super well written


#3771

I have been so radio silent and I am super sorry about that. It’s the weekend, so that means no writing for me. Reading, anime, and video games is my calling until monday rolls around. All my TV shows are coming back.

anyway, so I had another story like dream. it was this girl who was invited to this costume party and I don’t know if she took something or not, but when she left, she kept seeing her old neighborhood and nearly ran off a cliff. Everyone thought she was crazy afterwards.

I’m thinking this is a mystery thriller, but like young adult but i don’t knowww, I got other books to do


#3772

fdifjsid sure


#3773

@BaxterWilhelm Soul twin!! I need to know how deep our bond goes…have you ever read A Tree Grows in Brooklyn? :crossed_fingers:t5::crossed_fingers:t5::crossed_fingers:t5::crossed_fingers:t5::crossed_fingers:t5:


#3774

Lol any time :slight_smile: My day is going well so far. Thank you for asking.


#3775

There was a lot that was good but , some parts that i didn’t enjoy but everyone has different taste. So you might like it.


#3776

Okieee thank you! I’ll give it a chance. The blurb was rather interesting


#3777

No problem! Getting any writing done?


#3778

The key is… slow motion! Have you seen Robert Downey Jnr’s Sherlock? Or The Equaliser? Where the fight scenes are stripped back moment by moment. I do that. I imagine the whole thing so slowly that I can see where someone might get a punch in, or where someone’s leg will land so that it’s fluid and not jarring. Then when written, it seems faster than in my head :joy::joy::joy::crazy_face:


#3779

Imma pretend i didn’t publish three chapters in one because I got too excited about books


#3780

THIS is good advice but I can’t even imagine trying to write like that it’d take me 1000 words no tyvm fudfsfsd


#3781

That’s such good advice! When I do mine, I like “act out” parts of it. So, I look crazy punching and kicking around my desk :joy::joy: I like yours better. People won’t think I’m crazy if they saw that