Hi! If you haven’t read this topic yet you probably should as of this is an extension of it, but you can help without as well if you want. It may just give you some more information!
tldr; I’m writing a short story based on a dream I had. [insert the beginning I shared to ask if it sounded like a good idea]
I need help with the blurb, or reactions to it. Something that can give me an idea if it is good or bad, possibly what can be done better. It’s a short story so I don’t want to give too much away, but I feel like I’ve captured it quite well in everything but the last sentence yet because… I didn’t know how to end it because I’m still drafting. Just wanna hear some thoughts!
Current blurb to They Will Ring Our Name:
In Sabina’s city, murder is routine. Every day someone is chosen for the Certainty and given two options: being executed on the spot or go into treatment for what’s said to be an abstruse heart fever that may eradicate the whole city if they are not kept in check. Until recently, people picked and died no matter their choice. Now, they’re tired of it. When a name gets called and Sabina has no choice but to stake her own life, she and her friends set out for the escape of their lifetime. Taking them from their home streets to the floors of the bizarre Red Plaza, there’s no certainty anyone will get out alive.
*changes from original are put in cursive