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#41

Hi! I was able to give feedback on the first 5 chapters of your story! Can’t wait to continue reading!


#42

Thank you a TON!! Your feedback was so kind and I very helpful!:bluehearts:


#43
  • Title of Book Dragon Rider In The Modern World
  • Genre fantasy
  • Summary: Valerie Jackson has lived fifteen years being completely ordinary. And she is perfectly fine with that. Some people live the adventures and others read them. Valerie was perfectly happy being an innocent bystander, until the tables turn and she finds herself in the possession of a dragon egg.

Suddenly thrown into an adventure story she never expected, Valerie scrambles to keep her new secret and somehow balance the daily struggles of being a teenager.

But, life never goes exactly as planned, especially when you’re a modern day Dragon Rider.

  • Link: https://my.w.tt/mNHJ2MWc3U
  • Where you would like to receive your feedback (EX. Comments here, Story comments, PM) pm or story comments
  • Any other information you find important for me to know!

#44

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title: a game of changing tides

Genre: teen fiction, fantasy, romance

summary: Adelyn’s quick hands and knack for thievery had a bad habit of putting her in dangerous situations, but forcing her into the path of Nikolai Kors was the worst of them all.

A pirate captain with years of death and destruction under his belt, Nikolai has spent ages searching for the one thing that could make every loss, gamble and lie worth it, and Adelyn is the one person who knows where it is. But when fate strikes, it’s revealed that Adelyn is more than just a common thief that stole a watch: she’s the second piece to the puzzle Nik has been desperate to solve.

Together, Nikolai and Adelyn must venture the seven seas and battle monsters of every kind. Should they succeed, Adelyn would have enough money to buy herself out of the life of thievery she’s been living for years, but Nikolai hasn’t been entirely honest with her… because there’s a whole lot more than just riches at the end of this game.

link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/119861519-a-game-of-changing-tides

anywhere really! I could also send you the link to the google docs version and you could do inline comments on that? It doesn’t really matter to me

I don’t think theres anything else important… thank you!


#45
  • Title of Book Ivory Black
  • Genre Teen Fiction
  • Summary Kai Haywood never thought anything of being adopted by a white family. What was the problem ? She had a stable home with two siblings and parents that loved her but that wasn’t the way Aaliyah Jackson saw it, in fact everything changed when Kai met Aaliyah. Kai soon realized she had no clue who she really was.
  • Link https://www.wattpad.com/637525670-ivory-black-author-notes
  • Where you would like to receive your feedback (EX. Comments here, Story comments, PM) Story Comments
  • Any other information you find important for me to know! No

#46

Title: Lizzy & Darcy
Genre: Teen Fiction
Summary:
When Lizzy Bennet left New York and moved to Hertford, a small town in Washington, she knew that everything was going to be different. What she didn’t know was that she would meet someone who would change her life forever.
Darcy Williams is the reigning queen of Hertford Academy, and when Lizzy and Darcy clash, sparks of fury, and something more, fly. It confuses them both and Lizzy starts to discover her true self.

Lizzy must navigate through new emotions, friendships and hardships, all while dealing with her four sisters, an eccentric father, and a mother who, despite being in the West for years, is still trying to find a balance between her Indian heritage and her mixed family.

Junior year for Lizzy Bennet is going to be quite eventful.

Inspired by Jane Austen’s Pride and Prejudice.

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/180787262-lizzy-darcy

I’d love feedback in the story comments, and here, if possible!

Thank you!


#47

Hi! I got to read the first 5 chapters of Valiant! Normally fantasy style like this really isn’t my thing, but to my own surprised really enjoyed it. Your cover picture is very simple and clean which is something I personally like. I also thought the same of your summary and prologue, which left readers intrigued to continue reading. The chapters themselves are very well written and unique. You are super descriptive with all of your characters which is super important! Good job! Keep writing!


#48

Comments up on your chapters! Great story so far!
Just a reminder I love writing and talking to other writers and I would really appreciate it if you checked out my new book! https://www.wattpad.com/story/181082375-on-my-own


#49

Comments up on your chapters! I only had a chance to read the first 3, but I will definitely be continuing. One of my favorites and definitely brought me back to 2008 when I was obsessed with Pirates of the Carribean. Loved it so far, great writing!
Just a reminder I love writing and talking to other writers and I would really appreciate it if you checked out my new book! https://www.wattpad.com/story/181082375-on-my-own


#50

For sure! Thank you so much for doing this, I really appreciate it. I’ve already started reading your book, too, and it’s really great so far!


#51

Comments are up! That was truly amazing! I can’t wait for the next update! It would mean the world if you would check out my new story, https://www.wattpad.com/story/181082375-on-my-own


#52

Thank you so much! It truly means the world!


#53

Hey, thanks for the read! I am so appreciative of the time you took out of your day to go ahead and check out my work. All I can say is I hope you enjoyed :slight_smile:


#54

Thanks. I appreciate the feedback


#55

Title: The Perfect Melody
Genre: Teen fiction
Link: Here

Summary: Everyone has a dream. What’s rare, is the courage to follow it to the dark places where it leads. Your motivation determines how much you are willing to do. Never give up on your dreams, and work your best to reach you goals… And always remember: everything happens for a reason!

With these thoughts, both, Ayden and Harmony, are willing to face life.
But what to do when life itself happens? How to rise above its obstacles?

When the perfect dance moves merge smoothly with the perfect melody, the perfect harmony engenders…

Cover

Feedback is best in the comments section.
Thank you for your time :slight_smile:


#56

Title: The Rookie
Genre: Mystery/Thriller
Summary: The Kensington’s…
The blurred line between right and wrong…
The Tooth Fairy, a notorious serial killer known for taking the teeth of his victims, is on the prowl in the darkened streets of Washington D.C. Since her first day with the FBI, Danielle Kensington, has been trying to hunt the killer down, but no matter how hard she tries, the Tooth Fairy always seems to be one step a head.
Every week that goes by Danielle finds herself falling farther off of the deranged mans path, and with every wrong turn with her case she finds herself back in the arms of the arms of Grayson, Selvick, the man she knows will cause her to loose everything she’s worked for; the one place that she truly feels safe.
Danielle knows to stay clear of Greyson, but when tragedy strikes in the worse way, he may be the only one that can pull her out of the darkness before it consumes her completely.
Enter of the world of the Kensington siblings, the family that strikes pure fear into the hearts of the criminals and feds alike.
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/126224420-the-rookie
Feedback: Here or the story works for me.


#57

Hi! I’d love it if you could take a look at my new story!
I started it recently, so there’s only one chapter up so far.

Title : Words Left Unsaid
Genre : Young Adult
Summary : Hana never thought she would lose her mother so soon. As she tries to work her way through grief, loneliness and sorrow, she meets Zacharia, who is her polar opposite. Everything separates them and puts them on different ends of the spectrum. So, after one fateful meeting at the airport, they don’t imagine they’ll ever meet again. But destiny had other plans for them. Crashing them together, it forces them to connect over an unexpected factor.
Link : https://www.wattpad.com/story/181609322-words-left-unsaid
Feedback: If possible, I’d like to receive in-line comments as you read then a constructive more lenghty comment at the end!

Thank you for your time! xx


#58

Hello! I’d love some honest feedback on my current WIP!

Title of Book: The Eagle’s Arrow
Genre: steampunk adventure
Summary: An unlikely airship crew travels around an alternate history steampunk world following riddles from a missing inventor.
Link: Here!
Where you would like to receive your feedback: Comments on the story itself (inline or main; it’s up to you) would be great!
Any other information you find important for me to know: Thank you so much for doing this!


#59

I left comments on your chapter! I really enjoyed it and can’t wait to read more!

Thank you for checking out my book it means the world!


#60
  • Title of Book: Contouring
  • Genre: short story
  • Summary: a short story about family drama as the protagonist attempts to understand the difficult decisions that her family makes.
  • Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/96620237-contouring
  • Where you would like to receive your feedback (EX. Comments here, Story comments, PM): story comments
  • Any other information you find important for me to know!: thank you for doing this! will check your story out