I’m writing a book at the moment. As I look through my older chapters, I feel more and more that all of my sentences are the same, and my writing isn’t dynamic enough, especially in some places. Any tips?
Here’s a sample:
Over the last five or so years, I have managed to keep my powers a secret. I don’t want anyone trying to use me for anything, whether it be lab experiments or espionage. So I keep to myself. My powers help with that, since I can create a lot of things just by thinking it and using my magic, so I don’t need to interact with people unnecessarily. I can’t do everything though, my powers are still finite.
Today is my seventeenth birthday, December twenty-first, and it’s chilly and snowing. I don’t mind, after all, I can survive most things because of my powers.
I wave my hands again, and a single cupcake appears, with a raspberry instead of a cherry on top. I softly hum ‘Happy Birthday’ to myself, and take a bite. It tastes pretty good, especially considering it didn’t exist five minutes ago.
After finishing my pitiful birthday cake, I wave my hands and the wrapper disappears, and then I just sit there for a bit, a ball of fire in my hand to make me even warmer, the light bouncing off the walls. I think of the past five years, being by myself, having no one at all. I don’t think I’ve even talked to anyone this week. Literally, not a single word. But I can deal with being lonely.