Title : Shadows paradox (Third draft)
(I hope I’m allowed to post the cover here too)
Chapters 17 (Including act dividers and an epilogue)
What’s the story about ?
This story follows Dan. A student at Melbourne University. He has a peculiar ability to traverse the multiverse.
One day he has an experiment but it was stopped before it could start after meeting with a mysterious person that has ties with a secret group known as Nerola but to the public, it’s called Globe City.
With this knowledge, Dan is placed in a dangerous situation with his life along with his friends are in danger.
What I’m looking for?
I’m looking for feedback on the book plot
Where I can improve on
What I should add
If there anything I should remove
Grammar and punctuation
What can I do in return ?
I can return a permanent follow and give feedback on your story as well
Now what I’m thinking is to determine if you want to go read the whole book we can exchange our first 3 chapters and send each-other feedback on the following suggestions listed above or anything else we might find?
I hope this ok?
Now if you have any preferred method of sending your story let me know as well. Either being wattpad or google doc or PDF.
I am in no rush for when the reading needs to be completed but I do want to know how I can improve the story plot and finalize it before I write the sequel
link to my story