you covered the first two paragraphs there is nothing on the third and fourth
anyway since I have another blurb that needs rated I’m going to rate your blurb
The hook. where is it? Nothing in this summary makes me ask enough questions to read the book. Not enough info is the key because anyone with a question will read on to get it answer
not to mention there’s no info on the setting and I have no clue what your book is about other than a person with an abnormal name who is different from eleven other children and will fight to the death. what is Leonidas?
I have too many questions and no hook
therefore due to the lack of hook and info, I have no intrigue to read your story and give it a 2/10. I suggest adding actual info to your description and making it polished so people will not assume your story is written as sloppily as the description without polish and missing clauses. Your summary also has a run on sentence and lacks punctuation in multiple places.
When autistic student Aokigahara Yamamoto is found in the lobby of his school under a balcony in a pool of his own blood half alive a suicide attempt seemed to be the only logical explanation. Even then odd things started happening to the students and Amma and Krystain both knew that it was not a suicide. Launching themselves into an investigation it doesn’t take them long to find something evil is at hand in the halls of Hawk Falls Charter Highschool and it was far from human.
When Aoki mumbles that ‘the black god’ had harmed him Amma and Krystain broaden their research. Will they be able to save their friend from the grasp of the demon who holds him hostage or will those in the school all perish at its hands?