Karan Seraph Critiques (open)

critiques

#82

Wattpad Username: Odemira

Current title of work to be critiqued: A City of Shadows

URL for the main navigation page of the work to be critiqued: https://www.wattpad.com/story/153756033-a-city-of-shadows

Chapters/parts for this request: Chapter 1 and 2

Wattpad Category for the work: Fantasy

Type(s) of feedback requested: Dialogue, pace, clarity (I feel like certain parts are info heavy but I am so used to looking at it that I can’t tell)

Any type(s) of feedback not wanted: Nope

Anything else? Thank you for your consideration


#83

Wattpad Username: Everest Neverlynn

Current title of work to be critiqued: Red – The Asylum Boys

URL for the main navigation page of the work to be critiqued: https://www.wattpad.com/story/122311898-red

Chapters/parts for this request: My chapters are kind of awkward. There’s a long one, a tiny one called a “part” (it’s less than 1000 words I think) and then another chapter. If you could review those two and the small part that divides them (mostly for your sake so you understand what going on. And overall, they’re called: Prologue, Part 1, and the Heist of Carnival) that would be wonderful, thanks!

Wattpad Category for the work: Mystery/thriller

Type(s) of feedback requested: General content, don’t focus too much on the grammar and stuff because it still has to go through some edits.

Any type(s) of feedback not wanted: Grammar, punctuation editing, stuff like that.

Anything else? Have fun reading it? XD


#84

Title: Adventures of Prince Vajendra

Wattpad category: Fantasy

Blurb:
Meet Prince Vajendra, aka the so-called spiritual Rishi of the continent of Vishaputra, a flat earth. He’s a man not interested in saving the world, but having his own adventures. A man that can talk with Gods, deal with flying airships, throw exploding bombs into the air. He must retrieve the powers that an evil Pharoah, named Nahakasha has taken from him. This story goes into a series of episodic sub-plots more than an overarching story.

I need this please as I am unsure where to categorise this.

**Current title of work to be critiqued:**Adventure of Prince Vajendra
Wattpad Username: Wandering1234
URL: **Link:**https://www.wattpad.com/story/169477580-the-adventures-of-prince-vajendra

Type(s) of feedback requested: What was said on the first post. Give the feedback that you will give I guess.

Plz post feedback as a comment on my story - it gives more views.

Dark Fantasy (Sub)genre Consulting - Really need this.

Chapters: First 5 plz.

**Link:**https://www.wattpad.com/story/169477580-the-adventures-of-prince-vajendra


#85

Wattpad Username: Defiant_Spirit
Current title of work to be critiqued: Melody Collision
URL for the main navigation page of the work to be critiqued: https://www.wattpad.com/story/71084747-melody-collision
Chapters/parts for this request: I. feelings fade, V. dead roses do…
Wattpad Category for the work: Poetry
Type(s) of feedback requested: I’m not sure how to answer this, just in general? I’m curious if I can provoke emotional responses or at least provide imagery
Any type(s) of feedback not wanted: n/a
Anything else? n/a


#86

Thanks so much in advance!


#87

Wattpad Username: @creakysmirk
Current title of work to be critiqued: Elowen’s Yellow Cloth
URL for the main navigation page of the work to be critiqued: clicky
Chapters/parts for this request: 2
Category for the work: action/romance/general fiction (the current chps are mainly just action)
Type(s) of feedback requested: whether the story makes sense to to so far (any plot holes?), are the characters interesting to you, do the sentences flow well together, and more on how to improve, suggestions, etc’
Any type(s) of feedback not wanted: you do you, but having specific ideas would be better for me cause i like things to be put out clearly :lhansonauthor:
Anything else? i would prefer a PM, if that’s okay with you :communities:


#88

Wattpad Username: PreciousGem07
Current title of work to be critiqued: Sea High
https://www.wattpad.com/story/174276539-sea-high
Chapters/parts for this request: 1
Wattpad Category for the work: Teen Fiction
Type(s) of feedback requested: Overall feedback including the pace of the chapter, and overall engagement to the reader
Any type(s) of feedback not wanted: No. open to any kind of constructive criticism.
Anything else? No.

Thanks if you choose to accept. I know the queue is quite long.


#89

Wattpad Username: @Haum95
Current title of work to be critiqued: Guven
URL for the main navigation page of the work to be critiqued:


Chapters/parts for this request:
Chapter 1&2
Wattpad Category for the work: mystery \romance
Type(s) of feedback requested: on everything you see I want your honest opinion about it.
Thank you in advance :hugs:


#90

Hello! I’d love to know what you think of my story.
Wattpad Username: @draphy
Current title of work to be critiqued: The World Changer
URL for the main navigation page of the work to be critiqued: https://www.wattpad.com/story/174132370-the-world-changer
Chapters/parts for this request: Part 2 and 3 (Part 1 is the prologue).
Wattpad Category for the work: Fantasy.
Type(s) of feedback requested: Anything really, but maybe one with more focus on plot, pacing and characters.
Any type(s) of feedback not wanted: Typos, punctuation and small grammar errors, since it’s the first draft a lot of the scenes might not even make it. However, if you feel something is repeated or too major, I don’t really mind.
Anything else? The original first chapter (Which is about 5k words) is split into three parts. I’ve posted two of them so far. They’re preceded by a prologue of less than 200 words.


#91

Wattpad Username: Fanquinine

Current title of work to be critiqued: Tight Bonds

URL for the main navigation page of the work to be critiqued: https://www.wattpad.com/673596613-tight-bonds-mxm

Chapters/parts for this request: First 2 parts (1. Aiden and 2. John)

Wattpad Category for the work: Romance

Type(s) of feedback requested: Everything you have in “For Fiction”. Also, I’m not a native English speaker, so I would appreciate it if you point anything wrong, or odd-sounding that you find in there

Any type(s) of feedback not wanted: None that I can think of.

Anything else? Hm… no

Thank you! :slight_smile:


#92

Wattpad Username: jenny_the_writer
Current title of work to be critiqued: Is Magic a Superpower?
URL for the main navigation page of the work to be critiqued:

https://www.wattpad.com/story/86646941-is-magic-a-superpower

Chapters/parts for this request: (1-2) not including prologue
Wattpad Category for the work: Fantasy
Type(s) of feedback requested: Character description maybe as well character development and actions
Any type(s) of feedback not wanted:
Anything else? Any other feedback is good feedback


#93

Username: ellieerose_
Current title: Stellina
URL: https://my.w.tt/sbfhxK1eqT
Chapters: 1 & 2
Category: Historical Fiction/Romance
Types of Feedback: Just your general thoughts/what you liked and didn’t
Types of feedback not wanted: None
Anything else: The formatting is a little messed up from a glitch on the web version, which makes it harder to read, but the app version is perfectly normal. Let me know if this would be a problem for you.


#94

nicolettem64
Just Survive
https://www.wattpad.com/story/149799241-just-survive
Chapters 1-2
Science Fiction
Focus: Development. Characters. Plot. Pacing.


#95

Hi Karan, I’d love to hear your thoughts on my story! It’s actually set in the 80’s, so if you have any suggestions on that subject too, that would be awesome!

Wattpad Username: Anndaisylee
Current title of work to be critiqued: A Compelling Life
URL for the main navigation page of the work to be critiqued: https://www.wattpad.com/story/158117775-a-compelling-life
Chapters/parts for this request: I’d especially love to get some feedback on my later chapters (16-18) but since starting to read from there might be confusing, it’s ok if you choose to start from the beginning too and review the first chapter(s).
Wattpad Category for the work: fanfiction, romance
Type(s) of feedback requested: any feedback would greatly be appreciated, as long if it’s honest!
Any type(s) of feedback not wanted: any kind of feedback would be helpful!
Anything else? nope, that’s about it! Thanks in advance!


#96

I believe I’ve posted here before, but I would love some more feedback on my story (if you’ve critiqued it already)

Title: The Legend of the Moonflower Princess
Chapters: The next 3 from whatever chapter you left off from
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/659085416-the-legend-of-the-moonflower-princess-where-the


#97

I have the earlier chapters still in the queue, but I think enough time has passed that it’s fair to add another round of chapters to the end of the current queue.

Anyone else reading this, I have seen the requests that came in over the last three days or so. I’ll update the queue formally soon. Right now, working on some writing, then I’ll go back to reading through the requests.


#98

Thanks a bunch!


#99

awesome XD