I read through your blurb so far, and can’t wait to check out the rest of the story!
For improvements to the blurb, I copied and pasted it into word, and just typed in a changed a few bits and pieces, keep as much or as little as you want!
Nine people, four districts, one city.
San Moirae is the City of Luck and barer of good fortunes. It’s home to more than 5 million hopefuls willing to place their lives in the hands of the fates, and they favour this city over any other in the world. Nine lives will become one, deep in the heart of San Moirae. Now that the web is woven, all that’s left is to watch the pieces fall into place.
-Veronica, an excited college graduate still looking for a story to write, hoping to find it in the city.
-Cammilea, A newly wedded wife with a nauseating fear of commitment.
-Heath, A newly wedded husband and an ambitious business man, ready to start the next chapter of his life. Which will be harder - a new business or a relationship?
-Nina Glover, a far-from-recovering drug and sex-addict that has gotten herself way too connected with all the wrong people, and in such an altered state… will she ever fight her way out of this hole?
-Ren Glover, a trans girl, hit by the disapproval of everyone around her, but with the 7th grade transfer, could things be looking up?
-Tate Glover, an over-protective twin to Ren, at the cost of all his other relationships. The son of the city whore, and sibling to the ‘confused boy’, Tate is beginning to feel the crushing weight of the Glover name.
-Ezra Moore, a runaway who’s trying to lose his wretched (or other appropriate adjective?) identity among the endless faces and names of the city, to escape the macabre suffering of the torture house.
-Greyson Ferris, one of many trans kids banished from his own home. Left with nothing but his sanity, Greyson is determined to make a name for himself, so long as social services don’t come creeping.