Share an excerpt from the last chapter you wrote or are working on, whether its been published yet or not. Doesn’t matter what genre or how long it is. You can post the link as well on your excerpt just no covers please. Critique mine and I’ll do the same. Lets get this started. You can find the story on my profile or Pm if interested.
Here is mine.
It took Odysseus ten years to return to Ithaca to his family. Most of us know of his encounters with the Sirens, the Lotus Eaters, Scylla and Charybdis, Polyphemus. But the “library edition” will never mention what he brought back from that journey.
“Where are you going with this? Vlad interrupted.
“Ahem.” Ulysses continued.
It was two small cocoons his crew had found on an island, along with corpses of two unknown creatures whom they named “Drakon”. Naturally, Odysseus tried to cut the cocoons open to no avail. Until one night, his assistant Ajax accidentally cut his finger trying to get one open. Somehow, the blood had caused one of the cocoons to open, revealing a small infant.
Odysseus cut his finger over the other cocoon, causing it to open as well, revealing another infant. Twins. A boy and a girl.
Unable to control herself, Serina’s thoughts seemed to jump out of her mouth. “What happened to them!?”
“Quiet girl!” Vlad yelled, smacking her on the back of the head.
“Owww…” Serina whimpered as she flinched, rubbing her head. Ulysses continued.
Odysseus decided to take the girl and raise her as his own daughter. The boy was sent off to Athens, where he was isolated and trained to be the ultimate warrior. Never being shown an ounce of companionship, kindness or love. Only pain.
“You tell the story as if you were there…”
“Actually, I was.” Ulysses replied.
“And these twins. What were their names?”
“I wouldn’t be a good teacher if I just gave you all the answers.” Ulysses scolded.
Vlad stood up and walked to Ulysses, face to face. Vlad had a sinister smile. “No. You wouldn’t be,” he said, before walking out the office.