Need help with a curse

For the life of me, I cant come up with a last line for this curse? Help?

Scales burn bright
Shown by night’s light
Bound to the Beast Inside

Only to be severed
By a maiden unfettered
………

if it helps its a dragon shifter novel
not yet published

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what’s the purpose of the curse? (may help us come up with the last line to get some context)

basically he is a dragon shifter. But he ticked off the wrong witch and he is bound to his dragon form every night by the moonlight.

Do you have a specific plan for how he’s going to break this curse? It seems like a girl has to break it, do you plan to do the classic -kiss to break the curse- or something else?

Usually with curses it not only binds them but tells them how to break it, like a sort of riddle.

accepting who he is in both forms. Though she is more partial to the dragon side of him. It more about her accepting the human side of him in the long run. But she has no idea he (the human) and the dragon are the same being, until around the time the curse is broken

What about something that kind of says that even though he appears to be two people he’s actually just one, which could hint that she needs to accept both?

‘For what appears as two is actually one.’

‘As two may actually be one’

Honestly I suck at poetry :joy:and curses are always so poetic.

By both beings

(Idk what else could fit lol it is tricky to find a line that work well)

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The maiden also has fire powers which draw them to each other in the first place. I know you helped me, but it just came to me. What do you think?

Scales burn bright
Shown by night’s light
Bound to the Beast inside

Only to be severed
By a maiden unfettered
Within the power of fire resides

??? Not too sure what do you think? Thanks for your help by the way

Hmmm

I might need to actually translate the last line you had to have a better since bbs

‘Within the’ somehow feels odd Idk what but it does

Then without the ‘the’?
“Within power of fire resides”?

hmm not sure still sounds odd

hmmmm ill keep working on it. tweak it

I kind of use to make up stuff like this all the time when I had prophetic curses in my book… hmmm I think the last line should have something to do with how to break the curse and since that involves her accepting both sides of him I suggest maybe

‘When she takes one body in which both man and beast reside’

In this case ‘take’ meaning ‘accepting’ as one takes their partner in mantrimony. The line is a bit long tho…

Do you absolutely need a last line? I rather like it as it is!

:dragon:

Surely you need a comma, i.e. “Within, the power of fire resides” ?

Never had to write a curse, and I ain’t good at rhyming or poetry, but… maybe one of these?

Only to be severed
By a maiden unfettered
Or else be in eternal endeavor

Only to be severed
By a maiden unfettered
Or else be a restless endeavor

Only to be severed
By a maiden unfettered
Who beholds both as treasured

Only to be severed
By a maiden unfettered
Who sees two as treasured

Only to be severed
By a maiden unfettered
Who values in both manners

Only to be severed
By a maiden unfettered
To whom no kind matters

sorry for the late reply! Thanks guys!! I really appreciate all your help!!

Scales burn bright
Shown by night’s light
Bound to the Beast inside

Only to be severed
By a maiden unfettered
Where the power of fire resides

That could be good if you said “Within the” sounded off.