Hi there! This is my first idea for a YA novel so I’d love to get some feedback!
Audience: Young Adult
Length: About 50,000 words
Akira Vivek is initially in love with fictitious, book character Evan Gold, but when she meets exchange student Aidan O’ Connor, she finds herself falling for Aidan as well, particularly since he makes her feelings for Evan seem less intense. However, in the city of Siwan, having a boyfriend is scandalous. Nevertheless, she breaks all the rules to be with him.
However, the more she reads through the book, the more memories begin to resurface in her mind, and Akira realizes her past may not be what it seems. The main character in the book, Naomi, is a bandit in a magical kingdom, and is captured by its merciless Queen. In order to save her life, one of the protectors of the kingdom, Evan Gold, trades in a favor with the Queen to save Naomi’s life. He trains her to become a Protector. Despite their teacher-student status, Naomi begins to fall for him, but they cannot be together because the Queen loves him as well. When they get caught together in Evan’s bedroom, the Queen poisons Naomi using magic. To save her, Evan offers to marry the Queen if she agrees to send Naomi to the real world, where magic doesn’t exist.
However, the Queen replaces Naomi’s memories with fake ones that lead her to believe her name is Akira, a completely different girl, and sends her to Siwan, a city she created.
With the help of her friend Krishna, she regains all her memories and realizes the Queen has been in Siwan all along, keeping an eye on her and posing as her best friend. It is also revealed that Aidan’s father was once dating the Queen, and had died in a stampede trying to protect her when she used dark magic to save Aidan’s life. She swore revenge on the entire kingdom and sent Aidan to Ireland, in the real world, to protect him.
After an intense battle, the Queen is finally killed by Aidan, who chooses to protect Naomi. The dark magic then chooses Evan as its new host, making him evil. He erases Naomi’s memories, and when she wakes up finds herself in the Enchanted Forest with a book in her hand, which tells her the story of what happened after Evan wiped her memories.
It is revealed that Evan brought back Akira, as he believes she is easier to control. In another heart-stopping battle, Akira is faced with the choice on who to save, Aidan or Evan. This time, she chooses Aidan, realizing her feelings for him are real, whereas her love for Evan is solely because of the memories she had as Naomi. She stabs Evan, releasing the dark magic, which chooses her/Naomi as its new host.
Krishna manages to heal Evan using magic and brings them back to the Enchanted Forest, where Evan and Naomi decide they need to stay apart for Evan to forgive himself and Naomi to learn to control her dark impulses. He returns months later, and they reunite.
I have taken the concept of a real-life teenager who falls in love with a fantasy character. It emphasizes on the point that although the character may not be real, her feelings very much are. A lot of bookworms have ‘book boyfriends’, and my story is a unique take on an impossible romance with a man who may not even exist.
Although it is essentially a romance, the story also highlights the importance of memories in shaping a person’s character, and the chaos that follows when book characters collide with real-life people. Also, my story is written from two perspectives. The main character, living in the real world, and the heroine in the fantasy novel she’s reading. It essentially draws parallels between the events in the real world and the fantasy one.
Thank you so much for your time! I look forward to hearing from you.