After trudging through most of Query Shark I attempted my first query. Most of the websites suggest a certain points to be listed - MC, Goal, Stakes, Antagonist etc. I have attempted that but not sure if it actually fits the bill. Will really appreciate if you have any feedback on the below. Thank you!
Revised Query on post 10 below
I am seeking representation for my psychological thriller, UNFORGIVING SHADOW (87, 620 words).
After a harsh childhood spent in foster homes, ALICE BENNETT thinks she has it all figured out.
A nurse’s job in the NHS – check
A one-bedroom flat in East London – check.
And one heck of a migraine for company – check, check, check.
What’s definitely not on Alice’s list is being haunted by a shadow from her past.
When Alice returns home one evening to discover her abusive neighbour dead, she is thrown into the spotlight of the friendly, neighbourhood British police.
A few more run-ins with the police convince Alice she has a stalker. And biological-mother, residing in Wakefield prison, might know the stalker.
But Mum offers no answers. Instead, Alice finds she could land with an ex-con for a flatmate, and somewhere along the way Alice has lost five years of her life.
The Shadow strikes again. An abusive mother is killed. The DS on the case is threatened. Even Alice’s newly adopted pet cat is at risk.
Alice is forced to confront her dark childhood memories. Her past explodes in her face. Alice discovers she has a deadly Midas touch. Every abusive person she comes in contact with, drops dead.
Alice must dig out the truth from the murky gutters of her past before the over protective shadow kills everyone she knows.
Set in a noir London, Unforgiving Shadow promises a mind-boggling, twisted double climax. It will appeal to fans of Sarah Pinborough’s BEHIND HER EYES or Caroline Kepnes’s YOU.
The manuscript is available, in part or full, upon request. Thanks for your time and consideration!