Im currently querying, and thought it would be good to start a thread for those wishing to get feedback on their cover letters.
If you post a query for feedback please leave some feedback on someone elses. I’ll post mine first, and will then leave some feedback on whoever posts next!
This is the general bulk of my query email which begins with a personalised reason why I am querying that particular agent (clients that are similar, genre interests etc) :
This is why I am sending you my novel, Even Time Bleeds; a speculative fiction novel of 101,748 words.
The premise: What if suffering could damage the fabric of time?
Black Bridge Farm is a place of pain and tormented memory. When the body of a young boy is found dead within its ruins another child, James Hendell, is convicted as the killer. Twenty eight years later James is released from prison, days before the kidnapping of his niece.
Terrified that he will be blamed he hires PI Jon Leary, ex Detective Inspector for Colchester CID, to look into his past. A past he cannot remember clearly. He claims to have been wrongly convicted of murder. If that is the case then Jon could be hunting a killer who has slipped through the net.
As Jon delves into James’ case his own daemons come echoing out of the past. An unstable father who fled, taking his older brother with him.
All the while the ruins of Black Bridge Farm call him closer. Speaking of fire, of blood and of pain. For they hold a secret. A horrifying truth and a new, disturbing reality.
Can time itself truly bleed?
The blend of genre used in this novel is similar to that used by John Connolly for his Charlie Parker series, of which Every Dead Thing is the first. It presents fantastical elements, though these are always open to interpretation by the reader and speak as a metaphor for the experience of trauma itself. The audience I would be aiming for would be fans of “Stranger Things”, with which my novel shares some themes.
I am a 33 year old professional dancer, having worked in the theatre industry for 15 years. This is my first novel. I have been working with professional author Jim Kelly for the past two years on this novel as part of the Gold Dust Mentoring Program. I have planned at least one sequel to this, though the story could easily expand beyond that too.
I have attached the first three chapters to this email, along with the synopsis. I also have the complete manuscript ready should you require it. Thank you for your time and consideration.