Oh I like the promise of this one, definitely. The only thing that stopped me for a bit from continuing reading on when reading about Amelia, was the sentence that she had to leave - not because it was bad, but because I felt like I was missing something, so I was going back a few times to see what I perhaps had missed - then I kept reading further and under Nicolai it became clear why she was leaving, but perhaps I would have written something about how she is promised to him in her bit of the blurb?
I liked Nicoali’s bit, I like the last sentence in his, it gives a good feeling with what we are working with
Also the last last sentence - I like that as an ending, but I would probably word it a bit different so it fits with the rest of the text? but this is really just my opinion. I would probably write it like: For you see, there is a difference between “you belong with me” and “you belong to me”.
So all in all, a fine blurb I would rate it 8/10.
Oh boy, it’s been a long time since I was really active and on the old forum, so this is my first time on the new forum, but lets give it a go shall we
From my story - Under the Moon:
The most valuable to a werewolf’s person. The hidden name that is interlocked with the very being of one’s self.
It is this very name that sets that one individual aside from the masses. This one name shall come forth when you stand before the one, the one true mate. It bares everything within you and a bond stronger than most forms.
Right before all hell breaks loose, Blake finds his one true mate - just to find out that his true mate rejects his soul name, tries to shatter the very bond to dust and run away. What is a fairy tale for most, is a painful nightmare for Blake. But Blake was never one to give up.
Ember stands once again in a situation where running is the only option left. So, she runs. But the matters of the heart are complicated affairs, and Ember finds out just that, when she meets her fated one, her soul mate.
But it’s not just an unexpected mate that needs attention. Hell’s doors are about to open and the werewolves has an enemy set out to destroy all hope for the future of all werewolf kind and Ember might just have been the one leading it straight to Blake’s door.