Shadow's Critique Center (CLOSED for catch up)



Hi fellow writers. I am very willing to read your story. Every chapter of your story, if I LIKE it. Just post it here. Even though, I am not that good in writing stories, of course, I still know something. In fact, I have read thousands of books before and I can very much distinguish a good book from a book in need of big improvement. So if you’re willing to hear my feedback on your story, post now. However, I will only be able to give feedback on two to five chapters of your story. But if I like the story, I can do more.

Payment would be a permanent follow. Thanks. :slight_smile:

Anyway guys, this is a newly opened thread. The last one was closed unfortunately. However, don’t worry second batch, I will still fulfill my end of the bargain.

Just follow the format please.


Very simple

If I am in a good mood, I may read another book of yours. :relaxed::relaxed::relaxed: But that’s very rare lol. I’m always stressed.

Second batch

  1. @Writerthoughtss Ivory Black
  2. @rosemill2017 Ex- Future Queen of Salovia
  3. @modestmeriSchrodinger’s Child
  4. @thebicameralmind The Core Machina
  5. @shadowsettle Latte Heart
  6. @dear_wormwood Son of Winter- All the King’s Men
  7. @RLTiger Blood Bond

Third Batch

  1. @ttoteatspie The Shadow Cast Over Me
  2. @IWJKeller The Lord of the Island
  3. @tea_andbiscuits Reborn
  4. @hatefuls33 1000 and More Calls
  5. @chloboshokaGame of Mass Destruction
  6. @draphy The World Changer
  7. @thatblondreader You’re My Kind Of Wrong
  8. @Evenstar606 Shire Bottom Chronicles
  9. @WattFreak1010 Bow To The State
  10. @nightwish435 The Transcendent Vindicator

First batch [Finished]

I would also be very happy if you give time to check out my story A WORLD UNTOLD. Though if you don’t want to, that’s okay. After all, the payment is a permanent follow. Have a good day!

Check this story out! Notify me in the comment section and I will provide feedback on your own. If I respond late, that means I’m busy.

  1. From Rags to Riches by @ErinH333


@kyrrai Enlighten me

Status: Completed.


Title: The Shadow Cast Over Me
Genre: Werewolf


Accepted :slight_smile:


Title: The Lord of the Island
Genre: Horror / Gothic

Thank you for consideration!




Thank you, and happy reading!


@Nii_YA Completed. I must say, it’s one of the best first chapter I have ever read. It is painfully beautiful. I already can’t get the song ‘Love of My life’ out of my mind, and then you remind me again, argggghhh. But really, it’s absolutely amazing. Keep up the good work :slight_smile:


Hello :grin:

Title: Reborn
Genre: fantasy

Thank you :slight_smile:


Title: 1000 and More Calls
Genre: romance

(I forgot if I requested a critique from you previously)


Title: Game of Mass Destruction
Genre: Dystopian Sci-fi

I will follow you now. :slight_smile:


Hello! I’d love to know what you think of my story :slight_smile:.

Title- The World Changer.
Genre- Portal fantasy adventure.


Title: You’re My Kind Of Wrong
Genre: Romance - Young Adult/New Adult

Summary: " Anything can happen in New York and that is why Liz likes the city so much. Elizabeth lives a somewhat double-life, half glamourous, being part of the high society and going out with her two best friends; and half normal, studying Literature at college and working at a radio station. But nothing she ever lived had prepared her for the British hurricane that was to come. Axton was excruciatingly handsome and she suspected, trouble. She falls for him as she discovers he might be more bad boy than she ever imagined"

Four chapters published (currently working on the fifth one)
Read here!


Title: Shire Bottom Chronicles
Genre: Supernatural/Paranormal


I think you’ve critiqued some of my book already, but if it isn’t too much to ask, would you mind critiquing a few more chapters of my book please?

Title: The Legend of the Moonflower Princess
Genre: Fantasy


Title: Bow To The State
Genre: Sci-fi/Dystopian


Title: The Transcendent Vindicator
Genre: Paranormal/Mystery

Thank you for doing this :smile:

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What happens when a death row prisoner and a prostitute falls in love? A short story of mine, only 3 chapters! I hope you like it!

Genre: Romance, tragedy with elements of mental illness


Title: Siphon Break
Genre; Dark romance, summer romance



Title: Requiem for a Soldier
Genre: New Adult/Young Adult Romance