Haven’t seen one of these in a while, so I’m making a new one. You (hopefully) know the drill but if you don’t, here’s the gist:
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Ex. 8/10 - It was great! However, throwing ___ into your second sentence makes it a little confusing.
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Title: Trial 017
This close to the heart of the Netherworld, nothing was visible. The ever-raging dust storms grew more powerful the deeper you went, and the roaming predators only got larger and larger. If your eyes could somehow pierce the heavy dust clouds and look up to the sky above, all you would see was pitch-black darkness. No sun, no moon, no stars.