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#1

hey there!
i was free and thought why not review some stories :upside_down_face: :slight_smile: so link them below.:point_down:

Genres i would like to read: fantasy (werewolf, vampire etc), young adult, dark fiction, horror, thriller, paranormal something along those lines.

P.S: sorry if your story is Sci-fi, Lgbt or fan-fic because i personally don’t entertain them.

Form:
Title:
cover: if you like to add that one too :wink:
description:
link:

and i would be reading chapters on my preference like if i liked your story i might continue reading it… :slight_smile:


#2

Hi there,

Offering services outside of the #story-services or the #story-services:critiques-and-feedback is not allowed. I’ll just go ahead and move your thread.

Thanks for understanding,
Fray - Community Ambassador :frog:


#3

alright! :slight_smile:


#4

Not sure if you’ll like mine because it’s humour but it is young adult.

Title: Break My Heart

Description
When Freya Liu-Hampton moved to America to stay with her Aunt, she didn’t expect to become best friends with Dale Sampson, otherwise known as the school’s uber-intelligent popular boy who, for some reason, can’t seem to find The One. Now two years down the track and after several failed romantic relationships, Dale asks Freya for an impossible favour: to help him find his soulmate.

Problem is, she doesn’t believe in them and isn’t up for the task.

Well, that is until:

  1. she figures out that his older brother has a crush on her which she wants to eliminate immediately and
  2. she crosses paths with someone who kind of changes her mind about this whole soulmate thing- and it might not be who you’re thinking.

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/8112414-break-my-heart


#5

Hi there! Would you like a payment in return? I am currently working on YA Fantasy (it’s dark but not fairie related)

Title: Silent Echoes

Cover: image

Description: What would you do if you discovered that those who you’ve idolized and trusted were secretly responsible for child sex trafficking and Satanic occult practices?

Seventeen year old, Echo Strickland, found herself in that horrifying reality six months ago when she was secretly kidnapped. The other children in captivity with her are disappearing one and one. Fearing for her doomed fate, she must find a way to escape and free the others. When she finds an unlikely ally in the sensational musician, Julian Oliver, she discovers that a horrifying reality lies at the dark underbelly of global society. The two must work together to bring down this magical yet evil secret society and to heal the trauma that Echo has endured.

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/182538493-silent-echoes


#6

your story seems fun to me! i’ll surely give it a try :slight_smile: :wink:


#7

im all in for dark fiction! and this one seems something of my taste! :upside_down_face::v:
and no payment! :slight_smile:


#8

Thank you!


#9

Form:
Title: Little Things
cover


description: the story of a group of girls and a guy who head back to a hut in the woods where they hid some precious items back in high school. Secrets and lies are uncovered.
link: https://my.w.tt/iBgYqNlTIV


#10

sounds entertaining. i’ll add it to my list! :slight_smile:


#11

Fantastic! I hope you enjoy it! Thank you :grin:


#12

Title: Wolf’s Curse

Description:

Ashley Winslow has had a past that no human being should ever have. Years of a dark voice that haunts her sleep that nobody knows the cause of, well that is until she meets her mysterious roommate, Leon.

Something about Leon intrigued Ashley, something she had never felt before. Leon was different from all the other boys. There was a dark aura around him if this was another guy Ashley would have ran away from him but with Leon, all she wanted was to know him.

But what happens when secrets are unfolded and people are killed, will Ashley ever find the truth or will she always be hidden by the lies of her roommate?

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/13787539-wolf's-curse


#13

im excitedd! your story has all elements i like :smiley:


#14

Ooh, this is a lovely offer :slight_smile:.

Title: The World Changer

Genre: Portal fantasy adventure

Blurb:
Tahro Akagi shouldn’t live in two worlds at once.

Yet he couldn’t stop the magic that made him set foot in the lands of his favourite book. Not when he needed a place to belong and found it among the characters he cherished in the continent of Saishuu Riku. And not when he has to save them from the fate told in its pages.

But if a butterfly’s wings can bring thunderstorms, then his every breath is another flap as it flies, his every heartbeat a danger to those around him.

Unwittingly, he plunges too deep into the conspiracy of a witch biding her time against the continent. When tensions rise between the ministers of Saishuu Riku, and children are kidnapped by a man with butterfly-patterned knives, Tahro knows he’s changed too much. Events that should happen don’t, and his new friends are caught in a crossfire he wants no part in.

When the book says his friend is kidnapped next, Tahro must choose between her and the rest of the world.

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/174132370-the-world-changer


#15

Yay! Hopefully you enjoy it :yellow_heart:


#16

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Title: New World

Genre: Fantasy/Action-Adventure

Chapters: 21 (Ongoing, Updates Every Other Sunday)

Summary: One day I woke up with a single thought racing throughout my mind, “Stay alive… Find the truth.”

Follow the story of Anthony, a boy who one day woke up with only the clothes on his back and the name given to him at birth, on a cliffside to a world which he doesn’t recognize; a world in which he doesn’t belong to. Alongside Jay, a cold but full-hearted-mentor. Follow them as they use the unlimited arts of magic to make connections throughout this cruel world and fight to find the truth they desire.

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/146016605-new-world

Please Come Check Out My Story. Thank You!


#17

Hey there! So, it’s YA action, and leans towards the darker side (or so I’ve been told).

Title: Outrunning the Color Gray
https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/183733754-outrunning-the-color-gray-a-trilogy-book-one

Cover:

Description: Caleigh (Cal) has vague memories of death when a man named Artemius gives her the choice to become a guardian angel. A light-wielding being meant to protect and serve. In making this choice, she’s left with no memories of her past, save for one that she won’t recall until after her hundred years of training. Added to this, she runs the risk of dying as an angel and becoming one of the countless and isolated stars in the sky. Regardless, she agrees, and even without her memories, Cal is forced to realize that her soul remembers darkness well. As she and her partner, Allete, fight their way through training, they realize that the darkness residing in Cal may very well be her end, even before she gets to earth.

Link:https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/183733754-outrunning-the-color-gray-a-trilogy-book-one


#18

Non-fiction Terror
Small Sacrifices - A War Begins
Let me know what you think of my cover
The ritual sacrifice of the sister of my girlfriend becomes a link to a terrorist network.
https://www.wattpad.com/story/182999746-small-sacrifices-a-war-begins


#19

I’ll just copy/paste what I post in the SHARE YOUR STORY threads since that’s basically what you’re asking for!

BTW, I don’t mind if you leave comments on certain story aspects in the comments but if you could PM your review or anything highly critical that would be preferred. Thanks!


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Guilt Beyond Measure

A tragic moment in a bureaucrat’s life is far more than personal, and Dedric Emilius knows this. Following a nightmarish evening, he and his wife - the stunning, innocent Amelie - find themselves at the center of Evon’s city, struggling to discern how to move forward with their lives. Seeking to change the very fabric of what has made Evon great, they misunderestimate the toll it may have on their estate and their very lives.

TAGS: adult, dark, fantasy, fiction, gothic, medieval, political, drama

MATURE CONTENT WARNING


#20

I’d love for you to take a look at mine!

Title: The Fall of Mangiatorvi

Genre: Young Adult, Fantasy

Blurb: Gemma has spent the majority of her life feeling like an outcast, struggling to hide her powers in a mortal world. Suddenly, in a whirlwind of violence that leaves her heartbroken, she is recruited to Mangiatrovi University for the Gifted. Under the dual mentorship of the crown prince and a gifted fighter with intimacy issues, she somehow manages to earn their loyalty. Tensions are rising in the government as the country is on the brink of both civil war and war with the bordering state. Gemma struggles to navigate a new world, searching for normalcy amongst friendships, romance, and politics.

https://www.wattpad.com/story/175176204-the-fall-of-mangiatorvi

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