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#41

Username: GooseAndMaverick
Title: Dragon Son’S Apprentice

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Description: Aksana Kastel, a young royal guard in the Moldova court, spends most of her time enjoying the freedom and convenience of her families position as trusted and highly paid. Not much more than training and enjoyment take precedence to the entitled twenty-three-year-old.

During a surprise attack on Moldova, Aksana supersedes her life in place of the Kings only son and heir, as she swore to do dutifully.

Over her stay at the Turkish National prison, she befriends a cautious guard named Emery and the two bond over their inability to decide their own fates. As they both grow closer Aksana spends her time fighting for her life and negotiating the perilous courts of her life long enemy, all the while accepting her inescapable destiny.

When the fate of the entire kingdom rests on her shoulders, will Aksana Kastel rise to fight-or fade away?

Only time will tell.

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/24798303-dragon-son's-apprentice


#42

Title: I Returned in The Night

description: (Dark fantasy short story) Commanded by the church, a knight travels to a remote village to slay a dragon. Yet, he realizes too late the strange magics contained in these old beings and how little one must do to be cast out of his society.

link: https://www.wattpad.com/717229557-there-through-old-lands-a-collection-of-short

Note! It’s only one chapter cuz it’s a pretty short story.


#43

@SkyeSweven @bottle_of_rum @insouciantsoul @MystiqueShadow378 @_aych @JordanJamesII @xoAndromedAox @GooseAndMaverick @Ferret-bird

im sooo sorry guys, im currently extremely busy with some work at home. im hardly getting time to catch up with novels that i have in my list…
do you mind if i take my time to read them when i’m free?? that would be helpful for me!
sending love~ renn


#44

Of course:) Take your time


#45

Title: The Academy
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description:
Adira Parker does not believe in Fairy Tales.

She does not believe in Happily Ever After or Prince Charming.

She believes in Intelligence and Power in order to improve her life.

After being offered one of only three scholarship positions to The Academy, she will stop at nothing to perfect her Pixie given gift of air manipulation.

And no one, not even the Alpha, Jason Dwyer, will stand in her way.

link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/181398578-the-academy


#46

Title: The Sins & Secrets of Marigold Jones
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description: At Ottoline House Prep, Marigold Jones is the ultimate insider. Rich, beautiful and talented - everything she touches turns to gold. Then, one evening, the perfect Marigold Jones jumps off the roof of the school, screaming a warning to a girl who doesn’t exist.
A week later, her troubled roommate Emory is mailed a mysterious package that holds the clues to Marigold’s death. As secrets come to light and the threads of her roommate’s perfect life begin to unravel, Emory finds herself entangled in a dangerous web of lies. A web that might just take her life too.
link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/162629029-the-sins-and-secrets-of-marigold-jones


#47

Of course! Take as much time as you need!


#48

yup, no worries at all!


#49

Title: The Highjinks War (genre is YA with a bit of action)
Description:
Nicole Watson finds herself an obedient soldier on one side of a war of pranks. Frankly, she’s tired of being marginalized and overlooked and treated as an extension of someone else’ arms. She begins to question the war and why she and everyone else are following the leaders in a battle they don’t even know the reason for. Nicole decides she doesn’t want to be a background character in her own life anymore, she wants to take over the story.
But when things go sideways and the school begins to resemble a prison, the armies begin to fall apart. Does Nicole have the strength to take matters into her own hands and become the hero in her own story?
Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/119044646-the-highjinks-war


#50

No rush at all! Get to it when you can :slight_smile:


#51

Title: The Legend of the Moonflower Princess
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description: After beings of another world kidnap her adopted brother for a mad sorcerer’s schemes, the disfigured ward of Dasos will be sent on the adventure of her life…

Sahara is the young ward of the royal family of Dasos. Despite her kind nature, she is consistently shunned by most of society due to her mysterious origins and a scar that most believe to be a consequence of witchcraft. She is resigned to her place in Dasos, but the death of her grandmother and the monarchs of Dasos brings forth an overwhelming longing for a freedom she has quietly yearned for. There seems to be nothing she can do to change her fate, though.
However, when her adopted brother Nashoba is abruptly kidnapped by shadow-like creatures and a mysterious branded woman, Sahara makes a momentousness decision to follow her brother’s abductors. Suddenly thrust into a spectacular, yet, dangerous world, Sahara discovers a mysterious legend who could help her save Nashoba from a horrendous fate. Now, Sahara must overcome her own insecurities and trust in herself and others in order to brave this enchanting world and, perhaps, discover more about herself than she knew…
link: https://www.wattpad.com/691606982-the-legend-of-the-moonflower-princess-prologue


#52

Definitely! Take as much time as you need, I’m so grateful to you for offering to do this in the first place.


#53

Title: Abyss King
Description: Long ago there used to be a hero named Max, he was famous in all the world and his name was a symbol of justice, but one day, he was betrayed by his friends, and thrown into the abyss, a dimension full of darkness and monsters, 4 years later, he is back, and seek nothing more than revenge

I really hope you like it


#54

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Title: It’s Not About The Destination
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description: Sabrina Williams is gone…
No texts, no calls, no any information expect that her location on Facebook changed from Bedford, Pennsylvania to San Diego, California.
And it’s not the kind of information Tyler expects to get from his long term girlfriend with whom he hoped to spent the rest of his life.
That’s why Tyler decides to take on opportunity and drive to California with his long term annoying neighbour - Mia who happens to drive there in her old Toyota.
With both of them being opposite poles this road trip will be full of ups and downs, arguments, makeups, adventures, playlists and fast food chains.
And maybe even, somewhere in the middle of the road, they will find the meaning of true love.
link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/183729430-it’s-not-about-the-destination


#55

thanks


#56

I hope you check this out. Kneels by the floor, weeping

#287 in Romance # 791 Chicklit # 657 NewAdult
#1 in Childhood Abuse # 2 Icarus

Cara, a broken girl is forced to marry Neil Nolland, the ruthless billionaire.
Having faced torturous treatments before, she is sure he is going to hurt her.
But as opposed to her belief, Neil isn’t going to hurt her. He might even be in love with her.
But will she accept him, knowing his dark past, crushed by her own?
Will she fall for this self-confessed monster?

Burn For You: https://www.wattpad.com/584079291-burn-for-you-copyright

Copyright © 2017 by Bidiya K Damian


#57

Of course :slight_smile:


#58

Hi! I would love it if you could check out the first chapter of my book :slight_smile:

Title: The Pineapple Fountain

Description: The story of a college graduate who decides that there is more to life than just living after an accident almost kills her. Mia decides to take risks and drop everything, including her family, her friends, and her boyfriend to pursue the life full of excitement she has been craving. Mia’s adventures take her on a trip full of self-love and growth. But is this fantasized life worth the sacrifices she has made? After months of meeting new people and experiencing all life has to offer, Mia must choose between the life she has always wanted and the life she has always had.


#59

thanks


#60

Form:
Title: The Care System
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description: When seventeen-year-old Alice’s mum falls into a coma and Alice is moved into a group foster home, she sees it as a temporary blip in her otherwise happy life. The Murphy Group Home is a world away from Alice’s privileged upbringing; It’s here that she meets Faith and Ralph, two troubled teens who greatly shape Alice’s journey into adulthood.
link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/179168762-the-care-system