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#6293

Heyo! I am new to the community. Well not really but I am just joining the tab! I’d like to meet new companions. It’s getting kind of lonely over here lol. I love to write in the supernatural genre so yeah, that means I love writing about werewolves, ghosts, vampires, demons, etc. I am a panster/plotter so yes that means I do both. How? I have no clue. But I’d like to become more of a plotter because being organized is a breath of relief to me. I also want to throw in that I am writing a werewolf novel that is mostly a mystery/thriller and young-adult fiction with action and a tad bit of science fiction it’s called “When The Claws Come Out”.

How is everyone?


#6294

Hi there! Welcome :slight_smile:

Im also a pantser/plotter trying to get on the plotting side though, pantsing is too stressful for me haha.

Im doing well. Plotting out, trying to pmot out a couple of projects so i can get started world building :slight_smile: how are you going?


#6295

Its taken me forever but im gonna pm you a out your cheesy scene soon :yum:


#6296

Welcome to the Haven. Tha pack is very friendly :calmwolf:

Most of us are werewolf readers and writers, however there are a few who just like to hang around.


#6297

Okay I literally had to dig through almost 1000 posts to find it haha. BUT I FOUND IT!

From what I can remember your book is a mix of English and…Tagalog? (Sorry if I got that wrong) So for someone who isn’t familiar with the language I have no idea what the first bit says.

Good, lots of emphasis on the importance of the relationship to the person proposing. Is this whole thing one massive passage of dialogue? Have you got any non dialogue around this proposal? Breaking up the dialogue might lessen the cheesiness, add in feelings, nervousness etc. Show how they are real and relatable and not just a character spilling a huge proposal with no feelings or emotions surrounding it.

This might be a good spot to insert a memory they both share of how non romantic the person proposing is. Maybe they had an awkward date or a situation that could have been more romantic but wasn’t. Without more context on the story its a lot of showing and you are missing an opportunity to really show your readers how strongly they feel for each other, or should feel for each other…also why are they above a church? Are they on a mountain looking down at the church or are they actually standing on the roof of the church?

Instead of saying he asked for the parents blessing it could just be a promise he is making to John about their future together. Adding that he asked the parents and that’s what they asked him to do and be makes it almost sound like he doesn’t want that in his life. It makes it sound like he is being made to propose and provide those things for John.

Instead you could write something like _my dearest, I promise to be a virtuous father to our children, a nurturing and caring husband, the king of your heart, and your knight in shining armour. I will be there for you during good and bad, but especially through the bad. You have my heart, you have my promise, you have all of me. bends on the knee etc etc _

I hope that makes sense. I actually don’t think it’s too cheesy at all, I probably just cheesed it up more for you haha. But you could add a lot more to make it a really glowing proposal :slight_smile:


#6298

I am one of those few! xD


#6299

Yay for productivity! I finished, edited and uploaded the next chapter of Alley Cat all in one day!


#6300

Yaaaawn Morning guys


#6301

Afternoon xD


#6302

Oh, true. Afternoon. And I’m still sleepy.


#6303

Same xD


#6304

How’s your story doing? Did you achieve 3k already?


#6305

Nope, up to 2,852 so not far off :smiley:


#6306

Wow, that’s really nice! I just got past 400 xD


#6307

Niiiccee!


#6308

Thank youuu!!!
I’m kinda sad tho, because people just read the first chapter and drop it. xD


#6309

Yeah, that happens to everyone xD It’s annoying, but it’ll pick up :slight_smile:


#6310

Did it also happen to you? :0


#6311

Yup, the first chapter always has wayy more reads then the others


#6312

That’s too bad, you can’t tell if you like a story or not just by reading the first chapter. :C